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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Honesty in small quantities take me the long way around far from now until then and never instead cry baby, cry. I could have snuck by and slipped out the screen door to breathe in your smoke clouding my eyes how dare you dare me, then take it all back. Truth is, I don't choke that easy on stuffed up pipe dreams you might have been just what I needed but it's not worth my breath that dissipates in thin air. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (09-27-2003 03:33 AM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
enjoyed the read n write,, expressed well,,, |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Hi Blues, I’m glad that the smoke alarms went off, and you told Artie Choke to beat it. He sounds like a real stuffy guy. Slip out that screen door to the backyard, and get some nice cool fresh air... I just know that someday, your going to find that special someone. Who in all the right ways, really, takes your breath away... As always, this was really good! Thanks Blues! Richy |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
....psst....a little secret....I love it when you talk tough.... .....not sure why, but there's something about the poetry you write in that way...very arresting. There are subtexts in it that are impossible to ignore, and it's just as impossible not to be moved by them. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Truth is, I don't choke that easy on stuffed up pipe dreams you might have been just what I needed but it's not worth my breath that dissipates in thin air. Lori, I love it when you tell it like it is, too.... Gary says that I'm being "sassy" when I talk this way. And you know what? He says it's a turn-on and he loves it!! Go figure that one!! LOL I just know, sweet Lori, that that special someone is going to happen to you one day, and he will feel the same about you and you do for him.  Hugs  Ethel |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
There you go!  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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n2dmystic Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 253beyond the doors of perception |
"Truth is, I don't choke that easy on stuffed up pipe dreams you might have been just what I needed but it's not worth my breath that dissipates in thin air." I've actually been told that before ;-} being a chronic lover and all. I have a lot to learn, this moment provided by you. Peace, Joe from the big MT |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Lori, I send many angel hugs your way, sweet friend, no one deserves to have to breathe through these clouds of smoke anywhere and I know very soon you'll find that special someone who only brings light and warmth to the air! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Simply excellent! I love the way you write.  Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...I like to read you flex your muscles! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Bravo! Have I told how glad I am that you came back? |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lori, the mood if this is so well conveyed. Awesome write...YEP! I think so. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lori- this was fabulous especially the ending! I loved your ending, it was so strong! excellent write! take care *hugs* amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy? go get Janis preferably when she was with Big Brother & the Holding Co. crank the stereo wayyyyy up there past deaf and scream with her . . . (Cryyyyyyyyyyy babbbbbbbbbbeeeeeee) it always works for me the neighbors think I am strange (like I care) Hugs from tweets xxoo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
A girl just needs to vent, and I've been known to take advantage! ~Hugs y'all, and thanks for letting me breathe~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - I do like your thoughts in this. Right to the point... BC |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Powerful! You know your value and make it clear. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Truth is, I don't choke that easy on stuffed up pipe dreams you might have been just what I needed but it's not worth my breath Excellent writing, my friend... you pack a powerful punch! *S* |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
you choose the right name I tell ya. you flow so evenly, and this was wonderful. for the library in case you run off again And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you, I think I've almost come full circle ...again. |
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