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finding gravity |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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finding gravity i watch Scorpio sink into her realm her jointed stinger an erection of emotion her pincers snapping at stars trying to keep Orion at bay he seems to be laying low tonight his weaponry dim this is unusual for him the sky drapes over my shoulders and you my love tower my thoughts there’ve been too many nights without to suddenly now be with if you could only feel my words touch them with your finger tips the way you touch your fly-by passion Orion shoots an arrow it crosses the black finding gravity i find myself wishing upon it for us but like Scorpio i'll continue to snap my pincers like Orion you'll continue to shoot your arrows they’ll only find gravity and i’ll keep wishing upon them for us fate is not just whose cooking smells good but which way the wind blows (Ani DiFranco) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (09-27-2003 03:00 AM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Maree...you already know that I LOVE this. It reads so lightly...it floats off the page, and the imagery?...gorgeous! SO good to see you writing!  Love and hugs,  ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Simply Stellar! (Pun intended) Gorgeous write, Darkone. (Imagery, Imagery, imagery) Thick and dark... Ed |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
absolutely adored this..now i can try going to sleep..hugs..nite goddess |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
the way you touch your fly by passion!! That's a scorpio for ya... This is quite wonderful, really loved the feel of this Maree~ |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Maree, Wow! I’m gonna have to break out my son’s little telescope and check this stuff out! It must have been real creative and curious people like yourself. Who long ago, laid down under the night sky, and conjured up all these fantastic astrological figures. And all the great stories that went with them. Talk about romantic! This was so cool Maree! I love your imagination! Richy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
For the natural science of this... and for the eternal faith that all will be as it should be... you did it again! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Maree, this is so wonderful. I must admit, I have been "brain blocked" in my own writing lately. You, however, have let the words and images flow so exquisitely, calling me to attempt to capture that which has escaped me for too long. I believe it is called INSPIRATION! Thanks! Patricia |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Such a soft and beautiful declaration....you move me. I wish I had written this poem, even though I wouldn't have done it justice. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngel~ This is stunning write ... a compelling read~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree---Such fabulous and rich imagery, laced with emotion and longing. What a beautiful night sky you write, my friend.  |
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n2dmystic Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 253beyond the doors of perception |
your star shines brightly (use a pun, go to prison ;-}) eloquent. I love it. Peace, Joe seeking the serendipitous magical mysteries of life's ubiquitous twisteries |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Maree, I too am a Scorpio, sweet friend, I wish for you and this Orion to finally come together and find a constellation in the skies where your hearts can forever shine! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maree, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! just awesome! [This message has been edited by passing shadows (09-27-2003 12:29 PM).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
maree- such a brilliant write! absolutely beautiful! the imagery in this was really stunning, but that doesn't surprise me. Your work is nothing short of amazing. Love ya girlie. I'll write soon. Bye for now. Take care. Amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well Mmy...minus the ly's eh? haha. This is a good piece my friend. Out there in the stars but kind of solid ya know? Hugs K |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dark Angel, when you shoot for the stars ...you never miss. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderful write dear friend |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ohh Maree . . . only you could write of passion and love lost and found within the skies LIKE THIS amazing you are beautiful xxoo |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Shoot for the stars, m'friend - You can't miss...  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
In winter months, Orion rises directly over the home where I grew up... I guess that's why there's something about seeing that constellation that grounds me. *S* But I always, always, make a wish. *S* This is a beautiful write... I enjoyed it tremendously. *S* |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Dark Angel - you write well of these thoughts, well done... BC |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
"her jointed stinger an erection of emotion."..... what a line, Angel........enjoyed the poem muchly.......Larry |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am late and all have covered the parts I liked the best but the imagery in this was wonderful Maree, I wish I could do that! Excellent poem. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Dear friends, thank you all for your kind words and for stopping by. I do very much appreciate it. and K? thanks for the "heads up" so to speak I threw those "ly's" in the bin heh. hugs and love you. Thanks again all Maree fate is not just whose cooking smells good but which way the wind blows (Ani DiFranco) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (09-29-2003 05:48 PM).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Especially loved the closing Mmy- very cool poem. ... and what a treat-- a poem from both Babyroo and Tigger in the same week. Hugs JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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