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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-09-26 06:59 PM

Go On
[Konrad’s Times]

The finger of a life-force in wan
stroked the back
of his neck, and Konrad turned to face northward,
standing tall, then, uncontrollably, shivered.

Blood drained from his face,
and he knew.

Dana was in their small cabana on the beach,
drying off from their recent swim
as a dark-skinned man came racing across
the sands yelling, Senor!  Senor!

waving a boldly yellow envelope
that even Konrad recognized.

Wordlessly, he took the telegram
from the native, then turned his back and faced
a blue-green ocean, sitting down in the sand.

He fingered it for a few minutes
as he felt the knowledge well in him, damning
the force that made him erudite
before the telling.

He could hear her quivering voice
of Dillon’s having to speak the words
contained within to a stranger
over the phone.

“Iambe gone.  Stop.  Funeral in two days.
Stop.  Come home.  Stop.  Dillon”

The date of the ’gram was three days ago.
Konrad heaved a weighty sigh.  He could already hear
Jake’s tone and feel Dillon’s shuddering cries.

His hand played in the white sand, feeling
the granules as if he had never felt sand
before, rolling them between his thumb,
and fingers, making boulders
out of grief.

Dana, his chocolate latte woman, emerged
from the cabana, and started towards him.

Konrad stood, and held up his hand.
She stopped, and he could see,
even from a distance, that she could
recognize the yellow paper
in his hand.

She turned around, and he watched as
she went back inside,
knowing she would have started packing

but now unsure if she would come
with him.

and if not, he would wish her
Godspeed, and to go on
with her life,
while he went on
with his.

~*~

Sadly…inspired by Cpat Hair’s /pip/Forum55/HTML/000708.html

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (09-26-2003 07:44 PM).]

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

1 posted 2003-09-26 07:25 PM

"She turned around, and went back inside,
knowing she would have started packing

but unsure if she would come
with him.

and if not, he would wish her
Godspeed, and to go on
with her life,
while he went on
with his."

I'm still in the denial phase. Damn him anyway.

"His hand played in the white sand, feeling
the granules as if he had never felt sand
before, rolling them between his thumb,
and fingers, making boulders
out of grief."

Don't think I've ever 'sighed' in a response on here....
First time for everything, I guess.  *Not quite resigned sigh*
You handled this beautifully Kari.  Almost made it a bit easier to swallow.
I think years from now, I will remember where I was, when I heard the news....

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

2 posted 2003-09-26 07:33 PM

Sunshine,
I read Cpat's and sighed. I read yours and cried. Heartwrenching inspire, lady.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

3 posted 2003-09-26 10:03 PM

Karilea, like Lynne I also sighed when I read Ron's and here I am now almost in tears.

beautifully penned

M

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

4 posted 2003-09-27 09:58 AM

The stories you tell with such poetic efficiency is a wonder of beauty.

Eric

KristieSue

Senior Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

5 posted 2003-09-27 10:11 AM

...but I still think you should continue it...

man, it's dreary outside and looks like rain. Good reading because it's awesome writing.

"Vision without action is a daydream. Action without vision is a nightmare." -Japanese Proverb
~ KS

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2003-09-27 10:41 AM

His hand played in the white sand, feeling
the granules as if he had never felt sand
before, rolling them between his thumb,
and fingers,

making boulders
out of grief.
=====================

that is cooler and more perfect than a mere moth has words for....
ya made Duncan sigh...that says it all.

"If you feel heartbreak, distant thunder, lightning, earthquakes ...
If you wonder why the earth moves ... this is me missing you."

JH

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

7 posted 2003-09-29 07:59 AM

(smiling).....

so an end of one does not mean an end to all... unless

well done K... anyone that makes Duncan sigh has got to be good... lol..

porch puppy is still mad at me.....

and the mothy one thinks I am insane...

lol... then again..maybe I am..

you did this well... very well

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2003-09-29 08:10 AM

Sunshine
Sometimes a dark cloud will swiftly bye.
Well done.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

9 posted 2003-09-29 08:46 AM

Insane? No no no...
I belive the word I used was brilliant...

and stubborn
contrary ...

shall I go on?
LOL

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