Benediction of Murdered Clouds

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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-09-26 01:08 PM

I watched the clouds
Scraped across the tops of trees
bleed into the shadow
Of their passing
An outpouring that grieves

Who would staunch this
Destruction of the sun
And restore to me the colors
That paint your touch
So gently on my skin

I have seen the outstretched hand
One finger reaching for
The divine
And wondered:

“What then of us?”
“The ones who would understand.”

Billowed curl
This sky
Advance!

Your wounds absorbed
In the roil of chance
Leave nothing to mar

And only the limbs
That sliced you so
Are left with remnants
Of your blood

I’ll not call again
For my knees know the pain
Of the drought stricken word

Unheard

And my ears have grown tired
Of the never ceasing wind

“Forgive me Father, for I have sinned.”

With grave deep eyes
You said,
“Begin”

and all that crossed my mind
was the tops of trees
plunged into clouds

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (09-26-2003 04:31 PM).]

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

1 posted 2003-09-26 01:12 PM

Wonderful metaphoric quality in this one.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2003-09-26 02:34 PM

thank you Nan ( of the pilgrim variety)

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2003-09-26 05:07 PM

I couldn't begin to describe all I felt as I read this... so I'll just say you gave me chillbumps. *S* Excellent! *S*

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

4 posted 2003-09-26 05:59 PM

Oh Ron...Could we have a conversation, my friend.

So right, so perfect.

Patricia

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2003-09-26 06:05 PM

Ron...sometimes you are just something else!! (that's a good thing)

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

6 posted 2003-09-26 06:06 PM

Ron, you never cease to amaze me.The metaphors, the imagery, the flow of this is all wonderful.

Crystal

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

7 posted 2003-09-26 10:07 PM

Fantastic oh master poet

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2003-09-26 10:35 PM

(big hugggsssssss) And after the rain seems to fall a thousand hours, all will be forgiven and the sun will slowly emerge grandly and bathe your soul with begin! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

9 posted 2003-09-26 11:07 PM

You have just written something I could never even dream up. This is......there are no words.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

10 posted 2003-09-26 11:25 PM

"I watched the clouds
Scraped across the tops of trees
bleed into the shadow
Of their passing
An outpouring that grieves"

Perfect for today...you are contagious.

Susan

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