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Oklahoma Ghosts |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
It was Jake who called. His whiskey-toned voice rougher than usual As he told me the news Ending with, “I thought you’d want to know.” “Thanks” was all that came out. It has been a while since she Had even crossed my mind, But with his words I was taken back To the times along the dusty roads When staring out the windshield She had dominated my thoughts And drove me inside with a heart That ached for something neither of us Seemed to have enough of to share. Lacy crossed my thoughts then And her touch that in gentle lay of smile On seeing me would quicken something I’d thought dead within. ………………………………………. “Tell me no sorrowful tale of goodbye Don’t let the sun or the moon leave the sky How would the world ever be sane If I thought I’d never see you again? They tell me the way is not easy And I have heard that the winters are cold Still I would gladly take up that journey If in the end it was you I could hold” ……………………………………….. Two days later I found myself Just east of the Red with the sun Coming up behind me like the memories Of all those days and nights we spent It glowed Not yet warm And with not quite enough light for me To pick out the details or to find The right road On my own ........................ DUST OF SNOW The way a crow Shook down on me The dust of snow From a hemlock tree Has given my heart A change of mood And saved some part Of a day I had rued. Robert Burns |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Free verse... and fine rhyme... you just kicked my day into high gear... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
“Tell me no sorrowful tale of goodbye Don’t let the sun or the moon leave the sky How would the world ever be sane If I thought I’d never see you again? They tell me the way is not easy And I have heard that the winters are cold Still I would gladly take up that journey If in the end it was you I could hold” This hurt... Susan |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
What a way to start the day.. to read the words of the Captain. Jake & Lacy....ah yes! I'm awake now!! Excellent write! ~Morning hugs, Nancy~ ~ I love your glances meeting mine across forever or the room ~ [This message has been edited by Enchantress (09-25-2003 09:10 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ron: ahh the ghosts do like to haunt, now don't they? Sometimes it is quite nice though And drove me inside with a heart That ached for something neither of us Seemed to have enough of to share. Yes, a pity, truly . . . I know This is lovely sorrowful xxoo |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you can reach into a heart..you know? and pull out feelings one sometimes wishes to hide and not feel. M |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair, Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Well done, indeed. Loved this write  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
there is NO WAY that lacy would EVER love jake . |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Such a sad song...beautifully sung |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
so achingly beautiful, with contrasts that add depth and meaning. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Ron, this is superb. Loved every line, the flow exceptional...the rhyme...well, there you go, you captured my heart. You know I love rhyme any time and when it is sprinkled into a Cpat write...I got to be in heaven. Patricia |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Ron, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I have missed this series sooooo much having had been on vacation during the summer, but I remain ever so joyed by this saga! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is aching but wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
You grabbed me from the title and held me till the end.The ghosts always seem to haunt the mind in Oklahoma.I can say that for I'm living there. Crystal |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Lacy crossed my thoughts then And her touch that in gentle lay of smile On seeing me would quicken something I’d thought dead within. Another wonderfully beautiful write...in these words I have cut and pasted her is one thought.... Maybe, just maybe that is our truest value in life..to realize what love can and will do and how it fourishes no matter what happens, without it, we realize we are nothing, with it, we are complete, when we find that one person, who singular makes us just that together????? Wonderful write my friend. Thank you for sharing. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Some wonderful perceptions in reflection and lament....Well done! Eric Always love a little Bobbie Burns thanks for that! The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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