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ethier
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0 posted 2003-09-23 08:08 PM



In a dream
I see her there
Standing; Standing
all alone
She calls my name
But i'm not there

Who is this girl
with the long blond hair
It's not me; it can not be
She's calling for me
but i'm not there

In a dream
I see her there
Crying; Crying
all alone

She pleads for me
but i'm not there

Who is this girl
In this dark dank cave
Water splashing all around her
She's pleading; pleading for me
but i'm not there

In a dream
I reach for her
Reaching; Reaching
but i'm not there
In her long white dress
Fading; Fading
then she's not there

Who was that girl
with the long blond hair
Calling; Crying; Pleading; Fading
I'm Reaching; Stretching
but she's not there

Who was that girl
with the long blond hair

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-09-23 08:11 PM



Like a song...Welcome to Passions!  Please,
check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

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2 posted 2003-09-23 08:31 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Ethier, this is a most heartfelt and honest debut, sweet friend, I believe many of us have these dreams and I suppose the answer just comes in time! God Bless You, sweet friend, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Ethier, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your wonderful poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ethier, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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just out of reach
3 posted 2003-09-23 08:50 PM





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4 posted 2003-09-23 10:48 PM


Not just a poem, an experience -- you are good!

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garysgirl
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5 posted 2003-09-24 12:03 PM


Ethier,
I enjoyed your
first post and look
forward to reading more
of your poems. I hope that you
enjoy it here at Passions In Poetry.
and welcome...

Hugs to you

Ethel
garysgirl

Suetang
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6 posted 2003-09-24 01:14 AM


Welcome to Passions and thank you for sharing your talent with us.

"If I never met her,
I would have dreamed her into being"

Take care........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

QjQ
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7 posted 2003-09-24 09:19 AM


terrific first post,,

welcome to PiP

                                        

LeeJ
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8 posted 2003-09-24 09:28 AM


she is the stream of perfection, within me
a valuable experience and wisdom gained
welcome to passions and please keep on writing!

ethier
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9 posted 2003-09-24 09:49 AM


thank-you everyone for your replies,i enjoy reading your comments
KoKo
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10 posted 2003-09-24 11:23 AM


Liked this alot.
Welcome to pip

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

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11 posted 2003-09-24 11:27 AM


A very nice entrance to Passions.  Welcome!  I hope you enjoy your time in these pages of blue as much as we all do!  

I must have had my momma's will
and Gods Amazing Grace...

I'm a survivor....
(Reba)

Parker
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12 posted 2003-09-29 06:25 PM


Ethier, an interesting write. I like the style... it leaves you wanting to know who this girl is. So who is she?
Post more....

Parker

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13 posted 2003-09-29 06:33 PM


dream people...

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

mytuesdaywishes
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14 posted 2003-09-29 07:06 PM


good stuff, good rhythm...did you ever figure out who that girl was?

and even when everything was wrong, and we were mad at the world, it was still beautiful.

vandana
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15 posted 2003-09-29 07:24 PM


nice read
dingusjr
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16 posted 2003-09-29 07:32 PM


Wow.....I hope you find her......I would like to meet her myself!
Larry

JamesMichael
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17 posted 2003-09-29 08:16 PM


If not someone you already know, perhaps you'll be meeting her very soon...James
Enchantress
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18 posted 2003-09-29 08:56 PM


Welcome to Passions!
Enjoyed your opening post.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


~ I love your glances meeting mine
     across forever or the room ~

Martie
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19 posted 2003-09-29 09:03 PM


There's a haunting quality to this...love the use of repetition.  Welcome to Passions
ethier
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ajax,ontario.canada
20 posted 2003-09-30 09:33 AM


thank you everyone for your reply,and to the  curious..the dreams started at a very young age when my sister and i were seperated,i had no idea who she was but she found me about 6 years ago...thank you all again
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