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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-09-23 10:12 AM



Some.

A part of the whole
Delineated from the entity
By dividing

Subtracting

Late evening now bring the sun
In a weaker stare across water
And through limbs
Growing bare
One dropped lustful color denied
As the wind picks it victims
And spirits them in flurry
Of fall to an early pyre

I feel in this time
Some

Drawn on minds velum
Fuzzy lines
Un-straight
The separation of some piece
That is only a fraction
Of eternity
That enumerates some value
Given to these thoughts
And this soul

I would the light
Captured in whole be presented here
For you to see, and know
A hand greater than mine
Is needed to write even

Some

Of the whole

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1 posted 2003-09-23 10:18 AM


I feel in this time
Some

Drawn on minds velum
Fuzzy lines
Un-straight
The separation of some piece
That is only a fraction
Of eternity
That enumerates some value
Given to these thoughts
And this soul

I would the light
Captured in whole be presented here

~*~

Me, too.
This is a sum, diluted...

into an autumn perfume.

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2 posted 2003-09-23 10:20 AM


damn capt.....this is INCREDIBLE writing....oh so very well done...
so very much what I have come to know I will see when I read you....

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3 posted 2003-09-23 10:23 AM


Remarkable Ron...just remarkable..
..to be able to spend but five minutes inside your mind.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


~ I love your glances meeting mine
     across forever or the room ~

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4 posted 2003-09-23 11:51 AM


CPatHair~
Such lovely thoughts~

'I would the light
Captured in whole be presented here'


I believe you succeeded~

I'm sharing with a friend~ <))><
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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scorpio
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5 posted 2003-09-23 01:28 PM


Profound and inspired, Ron..

believe in what your heart feels...

Martie
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6 posted 2003-09-23 05:38 PM


Ron...Beautiful spirit filled poem, my friend!  
Susan Caldwell
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7 posted 2003-09-23 07:58 PM


'I would the light
Captured in whole be presented here
For you to see, and know
A hand greater than mine
Is needed to write even

Some

Of the whole"

I doubt that...

I read this earlier, but as you know I was having a typical "susan" morning and didn't get to respond...and now I have

Susan

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8 posted 2003-09-23 08:45 PM


love the sum total of your whole..in your words shared today.

M

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9 posted 2003-09-23 09:24 PM




(smiles) I believe we all have our sources in finding "some" more of that whole, sweet friend, poets like you, God, and Mother Nature certainly are the biggies! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, may you continue to hear the words of wisdom let be, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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10 posted 2003-09-23 10:41 PM


Yes.....we don't see beyond the nearest fold of the map...sometimes not even as far as that.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
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11 posted 2003-10-03 10:05 PM



You, my friend, amaze me...

This is beautiful...

Hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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12 posted 2003-10-03 10:20 PM


For you to see, and know
A hand greater than mine
Is needed to write even

Some

Of the whole''


HUGSSSSS

I think if my thoughts count you are an exceptional writer.....this is wisdom of a poet......


Lauren~

There's a song inside  my soul
One that I've tried to write over and over again

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