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Kaoru
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0 posted 2003-09-23 01:10 AM


Paint
stripe of tiger.
Woven silk fiber..


be
starving love...hunger, dried and tender.
from touch..
humiliation.


A desert sleeps, cold, void of moon.
An ocean wave screams, half empty.

Jade stone, pull gravitationally,
you sting upward on a downfall of spine.


Thicken water, blood made divine.

Defy the laws of physics,
mistrust the sprain of mind.

Be aware, this wick may seem
to burn slowly..as a second wind falls lightly
on fingertips aflame.

You must watch the distinctive lines falter,
as speed of tiger..
abducts the black of sea.

[This message has been edited by Kaoru (09-23-2003 01:15 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-09-23 01:50 AM


You write with the eye of a visual artist.

The stripes of tiger lended nicely to the perspective of waves and this?

"An ocean wave screams, half empty."

I could SEE a curled paw, nail out reaching.

nice nice stuff lady.



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2 posted 2003-09-23 06:41 AM


Meg, you have made me a part of the sea here missy

An ocean wave screams, half empty.

I HEARD that . . .
beautiful metaphors
beautiful writing
xxoo

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3 posted 2003-09-23 07:39 AM


Thicken water, blood made divine.

Defy the laws of physics,
mistrust the sprain of mind.

Your heart is most certainly persusive in your words and nothing will ever defy the gravity of your strength...your soul divine

Very much enjoyed, awesome write lady
Good Morning!

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4 posted 2003-09-23 08:32 AM


Kaoru
Awesome imagery
well done
Connie

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5 posted 2003-09-23 03:35 PM


black of sea,
liquid stone
and message
chalk written,
haze and scream
to signal
to beckon
to melt away

erm...yeah. don't ask were it came from.

singsongy voice

"meg's going insane..."

which is good. the more insane, the better they write

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
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6 posted 2003-09-23 03:44 PM


Um, did you really say once that I outshine you? It's not even a contest here. The winner: Meg!
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7 posted 2003-09-23 03:52 PM


Meghan~
This has rich artistic beauty etched all through it~

'Be aware, this wick may seem
to burn slowly..as a second wind falls lightly
on fingertips aflame.

You must watch the distinctive lines falter,
as speed of tiger..
abducts the black of sea.'


Compelling read~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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8 posted 2003-09-23 04:34 PM


Wow...!!!
Eric

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9 posted 2003-09-24 07:15 AM



Meghan...hm...I thought I had replied to this one.
Well...I guess I'll do it now...smile.

I really did enjoy this one...very much so.
It's so well penned and what with me being a tiger lover,
those references definitely got my attention.

VERY nicely done, my friend...

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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10 posted 2003-09-26 11:59 AM


  

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11 posted 2003-09-26 10:12 PM


Ne stopevous pas du write...sorry been watching Pepe LePueux..le pant le gasp
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12 posted 2003-09-26 10:32 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Meghan, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I just love your sense of imagery as I too saw the zebra-like stripes grace the scenery and the waves crest upward! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Meghan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

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