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Masked Intruder
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Near golden sunsets

0 posted 2003-09-22 11:53 PM


She rarely intrudes upon my darkness,
an infrequent miasma of unwholesome energy
permeating the dankest confines
of my incorporate world.

On the chance occasion that my subconscious
is breached by the stark revulsion
that now accompanies even the sweetest memory,
it is barely within my ability to gasp for air,
hold my feet, and take the next step,
hoping only to push the next occasion
farther and farther down the road to forgotten.

The sweetgrass still emanates its perfumed serenity,
the new moon has yet to show his face,
and I have yet to notice.

You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb

© Copyright 2003 Philip Zemler - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-09-23 12:06 PM


I feel your emotion here.
Crystal

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2 posted 2003-09-23 12:11 PM


expressed well,,,,

                                        

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3 posted 2003-09-23 07:58 AM


The sweetgrass still emanates its perfumed serenity,
the new moon has yet to show his face,
and I have yet to notice.


love these lines bud... they end the piece with style and with grace...

nicely done

Nan
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4 posted 2003-09-25 07:46 AM


With your usual poetic flair... Well penned, masked one...
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5 posted 2003-09-25 07:50 AM


Masked Intruder
Enjoyed the read.

vlraynes
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6 posted 2003-09-25 12:07 PM



Beautifully said, Philip...enjoyed this.
Hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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7 posted 2003-09-25 12:13 PM


This line sticks out...

"an infrequent miasma of unwholesome energy"

Nice!
  

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