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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Perhaps it was the early hour when the chimes only began their beat for my mind never truly rests, it seems it was when the storm was moving in through the dark morning hours, I waited for the tap of rain to follow the clap of need... have you ever thundered? Surely, there was a time when you felt the gravity of emotion so deeply, so heavily, holding court just there between your lungs and your heart in that alone time, just after... but she had turned away, or he went to get a glass of water not asking you if you were all right... the cry is choked just there at the back of throat, eyes brim, just too full, and burn and inside...you thunder from emotion's swell... ... last night, the thunder that woke me... it seemed forever for the rain to come. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (09-22-2003 03:13 PM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
simply lovely, soft, genuine and gentle...beautifully written |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
beautifuly penned and a terrific read,,, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
as Lee said..all that and more.. it touches the same place as a child's cry does... very nicely done Sunshine.. very nice indeed |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"the cry is choked just there at the back of throat, eyes brim, just to full, and burn and inside...you thunder from emotion's swell..." Oh... You have no idea just how well I know this. Beautifully said, Karilea...  When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace. -Jimi Hendrix [This message has been edited by vlraynes (09-22-2003 03:06 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea...Yes, I didn't realize it before..but now I think that I have, thundered. What a lovely poem!! |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
"...the gravity of emotion so deeply, so heavily, holding court just there between your lungs and your heart" ...you write pain with grandeur! Rf |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Though I haven't reached this moment in my life yet, I truly believe we can all feel this moment when we all reach this moment in our lives, sweet friend, then as we begin to finally get asleep, it all seems to drift by and serenity is felt through the eye of the thunder! God Bless You, sweet friend, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Karilea, My God, K. You have no idea how I know your words. A flood springs from this poem in many ways for me. It is a keeper and I am going back for a few more reads. Excellent write! Patricia |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Yes I have. Well done. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes... Beautiful..emotions running so deep. Gawd I love this. ~Hugs YOU!~
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Oh my .... yes, more times than I could possibly recall~ Soooooooooooo, much of all of us in this one, dear lady~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sunshine, a charged up poem - and those last lines - killer! Corinne |
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GypsyGirl Junior Member
since 2003-09-21
Posts 29 |
Oh yes, I know this so well. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Karilea, you truly are a poetess---one who writes from a well which is far beyond your mastery of the craft.  Linda |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Passionately expressed... believe in what your heart feels... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"have you ever thundered?" ...oh yeah! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes, yes I have.....many times....not exactly what you would call peaches and cream..... Beautifully written with genuine feelings and emotions throughout...Well done KJ... |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Yes, Yes, Yes!!! As a mother, so many times the eyes are ready to spill but the flood is held back. A beauty of a write. I LOVE this! Huggles dear lady...Marti |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
have you ever thundered? Oh yes indeed! the cry is choked just there at the back of throat, eyes brim, just too full, and burn and inside...you thunder from emotion's swell... oh I know this, was there just the other day. Magnificent Karilea... it's a hugs Maree  fate is not just |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
this reaches right in and pulls on heart strings....gently.... very gently... lovely emotion filled write Kari...love this.... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"last night, the thunder that woke me... it seemed forever for the rain to come." ....and for me....without benefit of thunder. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ohh man Karilea, yes, I do is painful insie and out *hoping it rained there* xxoo |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read  |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This is beautiful and touches the inner child that has been hurt so. Crystal |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh...and where were you just the other night when I felt just LIKE THIS but couldn't find the words to say so....dead on Sunshine! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The rains invariably fall - and usually worth the wait... This is lovely, Sunshine...  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all, for your wonderful replies... |
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