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The Unfolding ..............For Martie, on her birthday

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The Unfolding

You told me this once:
that sometimes a touch will take you
by surprise, slip past all defenses
before they exist; that the change
comes rising up through you
like bubbles in the sand,
will open deep within you
as a seed in warm soil
and burst forth unbidden.

The touch of time is always so,
the map unfolding turn by turn.
Each time we think we near
the destination, that we see
the final wrinkle at the edge
where the hands of time have
soiled it with that touch,
it opens yet again and there
is road enough to travel,
goals within the unseen goals.

The bubbles rising,
rising through the sand,
The wave not spent,
its force turned back
from this shore on toward
another, another, thrown
across time once again,
an undreamed destination


And the map, I know no more of it
than you, except for this:
It has no edge to find,
no demarcation, only roads
that run and turn and run again
to sudden intersections,
toward a destination we
may never see

The seed, the seed
pulled up toward the sun
unbidden and ordained
the soil warm, welcoming
and it will both leave,
leave and remain
return to the eternal
turning of the earth.
That is the core of it.


But the map is not the road,
and for us no sign along the way
can tell the destination
or even the distance
we have come. No map
can show a change of season,
shine with the color of
the trees along the way,
describe the petals of
a wayside flower,
the widening whiteness of
a breaking wave where the road
brings us along the shore.

This is the side we see,
and still we know that
as this map is opened
to us turn by turn,
expanding far beyond
the way we'll travel,
there is yet another side,
another map that we will
never see, and know that
both are true; for if time
has an end at all,
it isn't time.

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (09-22-2003 02:17 PM).]

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1 posted 09-22-2003 02:16 PM       View Profile for QjQ   Email QjQ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for QjQ

nice penning for martie,,,

well expressed,,,

                                       

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An excellent creation for a wonderful Lady.

Well don, Sir.
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The seed, the seed
pulled up toward the sun
unbidden and ordained
the soil warm, welcoming
and it will both leave,
leave and remain
return to the eternal
turning of the earth.
That is the core of it.


(what a very very cool verse that is)

But the map is not the road,
and for us no sign along the way
can tell the destination
or even the distance
we have come. No map
can show a change of season,
shine with the color of
the trees along the way,
describe the petals of
a wayside flower,
the widening whiteness of
a breaking wave where the road
brings us along the shore.

This is the side we see,
and still we know that
as this map is opened
to us turn by turn,
expanding far beyond
the way we'll travel,
there is yet another side,
another map that we will
never see, and know that
both are true; for if time
has an end at all,
it isn't time.

==========================

this is cooler than a mere moth has words for...she will be so very touched by this...
its a wonderful sharing of verse...but what makes it even more special is how by your words it shows how much of her words have touched you. You have encompassed her spirit true.

No map
can show a change of season,
shine with the color of
the trees along the way,
describe the petals of
a wayside flower,
the widening whiteness of
a breaking wave where the road
brings us along the shore.


OH MAN!!!
I wish I had wrote that!!!
awesome analogy and imagery!!

for if time
has an end at all,
it isn't time.


I love that verse of wisdom


one of your best poet sir!!

Happy B-day Martie

"If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ...
Lightning strikes and all you see is blue ... this is me missing you"

JH

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Ah Ed.  This was not a poem.
It was a heart's conversation
with one who listens.

As I know how well
Martie listens, I am sure she heard
this heartbeat
from a page away...

What a delightful birthday present.
I know she will be ever so pleased...
with a possible
that you captured her spirit, if only
momentarily...

so very well.
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silly moth...ya gotta click the library button.

(love the title too btw)
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ed...you are such a tender talented touch...happy birthday martie...h
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Ed...This is a very special gift to me...I will treasure it today and every day.  You are beautiful!  
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I truly tried to pick a favorite part... and it's impossible... the whole is too perfect. *S* What a wonderful, caring gift for a special lady... birthday gifts don't get better than this. *S*
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Right behind Suthern in not being too sure what the best part of this was for me, but I settled for this as it went below the surface:

This is the side we see,
and still we know that
as this map is opened
to us turn by turn,
expanding far beyond
the way we'll travel,
there is yet another side,
another map that we will
never see, and know that
both are true; for if time
has an end at all,
it isn't time.

Excellent work as usual and for one of the most special people I know!  

      Carpe' Diem
The Canuck, Sharon  

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Thank you.....that's about all there is to be said, I think. I'm humbled by the responses here.

Ought to note that I wrote this as an answer to Martie's own birthday poem: http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum82/HTML/000039.html

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Oh Happy Day to you Martie,~
and Ed, you are such a kind and decent man!
What a heartwarmer this is!!!

"People,  who need poeple, are the luckiest people in the world"
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Excellent writing, for an excellent writer.Happy birthday Martie.

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(smiles) Oh Ed, this is soooooooo beautiful and heartfelt, sweet friend, I marvel at how smooth and true your words flow and I know that Martie will forever cherish these words and know time will continue to gift her with many blessings and joys just as they will for you! (big hugggsssssss) You are one special friend to us all, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ed, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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This is the side we see,
and still we know that
as this map is opened
to us turn by turn,
expanding far beyond
the way we'll travel,
there is yet another side,
another map that we will
never see, and know that
both are true; for if time
has an end at all,
it isn't time.


I have to agree that this is one of your best Ed.

Hope you've had a wonderful day Martie

Keeping it.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

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Ed, this unfolding of your heart, and sharing of your affection
for a very special friend, was truly inspiring!
Gifts like this are, best given by surprise.
Ensuring that the reaction one feels,
is genuine, and spontaneous.

And how true, that no matter how hard
we sometimes try and map out the most
favorable course along life’s winding roads.

It is how far we have gone, “inside the heart of others."            ”
That truly matters...

Ed, you and Martie, are both very lucky,
to have each other as friends.

This was great Ed!

And, sorry I‘m late, but...

HAPPY BIRTHDAY MARTIE!!!


[This message has been edited by Richy (09-28-2003 03:24 AM).]

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wonderful write! I always enjoy you...

Happy B-Day Martie!
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Ed...Just needed to revisit this and send another thankyou and a hug.  
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needed to come back here too
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