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vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

0 posted 2003-09-20 01:54 AM




How much further must I go
how many more E-ticket rides
I'm sorry, Mr. Toad, but I'm
afraid I've gone too many rounds
in search of something not yet found
in wild rush of 'drenaline
'round blinded curves
through hidden doors
Can't take much more
I'm tired of this

Perhaps it's time
I exit now and place
a sign of warning here
Perhaps a ride on carousel
my life keeps spinning anyhow,
I might as well

...slow down and watch...

enjoy it for little while
I wave as lookers
stare me down in wonder
of one such as this
in childish turn of
round and round
but hey...it's safe
I won't fall off
no risk in this
the circular
in know of what
is yet to come
in recognize of
"here before"

Yet, even this
has ups and downs
and hungry beasts in grin surround
lions, tigers, bears, oh my...
and music, mocking
clouds my head
and spin
I spin
and
greet
each turn
as if it's new
the people change
it must be true I'm
getting somewhere
making progress
moving on

and yet

I spin...


~vlraynes


When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (09-20-2003 02:19 PM).]

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garysgirl
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1 posted 2003-09-20 02:22 AM


Perhaps it's time
I exit now and place
a sign of warning here
Perhaps a ride on carousel
my life keeps spinning anyhow,
I might as well

...slow down and watch...


Now, Vicky, this is a really cool write....
It kinda made me a little dizzy, but a  good kind
of dizzy....like on a carousel. LOL  
Hugs  
Ethel


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2 posted 2003-09-20 03:06 AM


gee hows Mr Toad ever going to become a prince ifen ya don't smooch him,,

very nice penning here vicky,,

                                    

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3 posted 2003-09-20 07:11 AM


ah what a write vicky, enjoyed it, even that I get dizzy by spinning words.

Great expressed!

((hugs))
Charisma

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4 posted 2003-09-20 12:26 PM


                                    

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5 posted 2003-09-20 05:19 PM


This is fantastic Vic, wow. I'm spinning along side, thats me on the lion..
Sandra

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6 posted 2003-09-20 07:02 PM



Fantastic Vicky...quite the ride...I was getting dizzy myself.

~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


~ I love your glances meeting mine
     across forever or the room ~

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7 posted 2003-09-20 07:06 PM


Vicky...Life sometimes feels that way...like you're moving so fast and end up back at the same place you started...it is kind of discouraging.  Maybe you should try another ride?  Seriously, the feeling in this is so well done.  
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8 posted 2003-09-20 07:45 PM




I put the universe on notice once.. um, maybe more than once...

[This message has been edited by Local Rebel (09-20-2003 07:46 PM).]

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9 posted 2003-09-20 10:59 PM


This is just too cool. Now that I read it slower *grin*
Good stuff

Life isn't really all that bad... just don't take it too seriously
"Poets have been mysteriously silent on the subject of cheese. "
--G. K.Chesterto

Nan
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10 posted 2003-09-21 08:22 PM


Kewl... Spin around five times... Do three laps around PiP... and click your heels eight times... You'll land somewhere for sure...
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11 posted 2003-09-21 08:26 PM


this made me dizzy. no kidding. but the meter was perfect and everything was absolutely ...i dunno. absolutely Vicky

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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12 posted 2003-09-21 08:27 PM




(smiles) Oh Vicky, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I believe we must awlays move ahead but all at once, we need to spin and enjoy each moment and what we have so then the memory's image is clear and we can cherish what was given to us without having to constantly change and forget everything! (big hugggsssssss) This is a beautiful ride of a poem, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vicky, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

NewEnglandlazurlu
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13 posted 2003-09-21 08:32 PM


Hi Vicky, what a great write. I can certainly relate as much of my time is spent going in circles and I never seem to get anywhere.

Maybe we should try the Ferris Wheel!!!

Hugs, Marti

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14 posted 2003-09-22 09:45 AM


How well you described my weekend, Vicky!  I got off the ride of life and spent time with three of my five grandchildren this weekend...and speaking of lions, and tigers, and bears, I think I have something to send you later on tonight...in the shape of a large white tiger...

HA!

littlewing
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15 posted 2003-09-22 10:05 AM


Jesus Vicky . . . you do read my mind
now, don't you?

Ohhh . .  a stop is quite nice, yes
stay away from the flying monkeys
they scare me (those wings . . .)
You will soon be riding free
just as you were meant to
xxoo

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