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What is this Love?
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What is this Love? |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
What is this This feeling unfathomed by man? This feeling that demands me Comands me Owns every thread of my existence? How is this This feeling inside me? This feeling that haunts me Drags me Envelopes me un an array of sunshine? Why is this This feeling so amazingly good? Good yet makes me quiver in pain Intensity Heat unrestrained? Where is this This feeling coming from? It must be the kiss The touch You should have never given me. I need this Do not want this But am haunted by this This feeling Immortality in the flesh Yet mortality in the pain that accompanies I feel Feel things unwanted Yet things that make me want even more Senses amuck with fantasy Phantasmic hazes shower my competence I am in clouded need of this feeling What is this This feeling that hurts so good That wanting is the only choice I cannot stand to be in waiting for this This feeling What is this This love that you have instilled in me? One that keeps me alive Because of everytime my heart beats One that keeps my eyes wide Because of the light emitting from your presence One that makes me feel By bringing tears to my eyes The kind that can only be described as happiness This love What is it? I want more of it But I cannot stand the torment Your existence has put me through This feeling that I have is never ending But must be still for fear of rejection This feeling that I have can only be stopped by one That one is the source of my torment It is You... yv P.S. As I've stated before, I wish to have critques if you have any. The true sign of a poet in my eyes is one that gets better because of the help she receives from others who share her illicit passion. So if you please, be honest. Thank you. yv |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) I am no critiquer, as I don't believe in critiquing ones precious thoughts, but there are plenty of wonderful friends here who I'm sure would love to help! (sigh) I understand this feeling so well and desire and passion can be both beautiful and destructive, just follow your heart and I trust you'll make the right decision! God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Thank you, Noah. Your beauty and words touch me and it is good to now that my feelings are also felt by others. And it is good to know that I am in the company of poets with such beautiful spirits. Again thank you. yv |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
you expressed this well,, |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Thank you for your comment. I really appreciate it QjQ. yv [This message has been edited by yv (09-21-2003 06:52 PM).] |
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