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Wind
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0 posted 09-21-2003 04:32 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Wind


On Monday
there will be death-
roadkill
tarnishing
these streets,

I cannot wait to see
what the future brings-
lonely Tuesdays,
you stare out the window and wish you were
somewhere else

fragile
but you could
withstand
stone rain

Glass lungs closing up
shatter with the need to
inhale
exhale

it kills you
but you just donít care,

so long as you
live to be 100,
(or live until Saturday)
die saving someone else
(when you barely know your own voice)

but then again
hurt yourself
slowly dieing
but surely
still alive
and thatís more life
that could be stopped
amidst a heartbeat

who is standing in the doorway-
strangers standing everywhereÖ

not afraid,
only jump at
touch

needs sound
but not from human lips

But you just donít care.

at this rate
weíll be dead by Friday


And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

[This message has been edited by Wind (09-21-2003 08:44 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Liz - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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1 posted 09-21-2003 04:37 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Liz: it still amazes me, and always will
how you see right into everything,
yank it out and put it down like this

fragile
but you could
withstand
stone rain

EXACTLY
Beautiful writing
xxoo
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2 posted 09-21-2003 04:40 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel



(big hugggsssssss) I truly believe that everyone who helps one another, every philanthropist, has their own anguish to work with, and that is natural, and that proves we are imperfect but have to accept the sympathy and advice as that helps us grow and live! (sigh) With this circle intact, we'll all die at some rate, but not this Friday, but hundreds of Fridays away from now, this is powerful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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3 posted 09-21-2003 04:44 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

My little friend, Liz...I am so glad that I know your poetry writing comes from your brain and not your heart.
Therefore, this is not the way you really feel inside. Right???

You know, little lady, you are a brilliant writer.....I just don't understand dark.
Love and hugs to you, my friend  
Ethel
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4 posted 09-21-2003 04:52 PM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


"fragile
but you could
withstand
stone rain"


YES...

Gawd...you write this so well...amazing.

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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5 posted 09-21-2003 05:01 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Like the wind, you amaze!
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6 posted 09-21-2003 05:27 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

Thabks everyone

Noah and Ehtel- of course I am fine. I just..think..a little much. but thats my head. The heart is an organ that pumps blood throughout the body. lol

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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7 posted 09-21-2003 06:08 PM       View Profile for QjQ   Email QjQ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for QjQ

enoyed the penning,,,

                                    

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8 posted 09-21-2003 07:01 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

may I ask what inspired this? you always get me thinking. cos its always something weird, and i love reading the origins of yer writes.

gah, some striking lines here..

fragile
but you could
withstand
stone rain

Glass lungs closing up
shatter with the need to
inhale
exhale

it kills you
but you just donít care,

you are the queen of mind aching dark. why does your muse never leave you? i just had to force a write out of frustration.

send me some. or i'll kill you by friday. That was an empty threat, i love you.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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9 posted 09-21-2003 07:06 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

lol gem. songs...as usual. a whole bunch of them
1. U2- sunday bloody sunday (I l#ve U2...thats funny when you say it out loud. you know? I lov you too )
2. KoRn- make me bad (I swear it's a good song)
3.White stripes- dead leaves and the dirty ground...dunno why
4. radiohead- my iron lung/ high and dry someone better take this cd away from me before I go beserk

my 'muse' never leaves me because music never leaves me.

and you shut up cause you are a great writer. i lava you


And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

[This message has been edited by Wind (09-21-2003 09:02 PM).]

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10 posted 09-22-2003 12:28 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

I'm saving this, it's so good..it hurts.
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11 posted 09-22-2003 04:52 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

glad you liked it meg

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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12 posted 09-23-2003 04:17 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

slowly dieing
but surely
still alive
and thatís more life
that could be stopped
amidst a heartbeat

You are such a good poet, and always you leave me with a thousand ways to interpret your writing.  

Good job~
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13 posted 09-23-2003 04:49 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

A fantastic write... Enjoyed!

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

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14 posted 10-19-2003 01:46 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

THIS IS A FORMAL WARNING!

WRITE SOME MORE POEMS OF THE FLY GETS IT!

(THATS ME)

SO, ER WRITE SOMETHING PLEEEEEEEESE?!

I MEAN, WRITE SOMETHING NOWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

SIGNED

I.M Notscary
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15 posted 10-19-2003 01:51 PM       View Profile for angelblueyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelblueyes

This is great.Your writing always makes me delve deep into my soul and see your interpretation of things.Not many do that.
Crystal
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16 posted 10-19-2003 02:00 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

OOps sorry i'd missed this one..ah yes the Bends i think i wore that cd out..and then Ok computer wore me out..for a minute i lost myself I lost myself
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17 posted 10-19-2003 02:10 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Sweet Liz...I knew you were okay. I just wanted you to know that I care if you're okay or not.
But, you already know that, too, don't you?

And, the music? Gary loves that kind of music. I like Soft Rock, like Enya and Celine Dion and Michael Bolton. But, I love Kiss, too....and the Beatles, and Rod Stewart, and Sheryl Crowe....and on and on...
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18 posted 10-19-2003 02:50 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee

Liz, I still cannot fathom how someone so young can write with such depth of emotion.  I'd like to think that I have a way with words now, but at your age I was feeling what you are feeling, but, could never dare to match your expression. You have a gift, You kick poetic butt....I'm saving this~

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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19 posted 10-19-2003 03:35 PM       View Profile for pandonov   Email pandonov   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit pandonov's Home Page   View IP for pandonov

painfully interesting
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20 posted 10-19-2003 06:20 PM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

wow...
this is...yea... wow.
I'm keeping this, k?

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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oops
NOW
Im keeping this.

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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22 posted 10-19-2003 06:58 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

eek you bumpers. you bumped it. and I did write something gem...two days ago. you just haven't read it yet

What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall?
All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall.
-yorke/bjork

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23 posted 10-19-2003 07:02 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

no wait a second raph? you lost yourslef a loooooooong time ago. phhlt. I don't wanna post it gem. I wear myself out.

What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall?
All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall.
-yorke/bjork

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24 posted 10-19-2003 09:29 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Liz?  where have you been?  I was just asking someone about you and there you are...

bump (b/c I know you love it)

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

 
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