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Martie
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0 posted 2003-09-19 11:11 PM



In thoughtful remember of the strength that streams; like fire, wind and sea...a memory from last year..a repost for the gift it brings of appreciation for life and things and those heros that fall suddenly into our life, I am remembering.



Backwash

I have tried to write through the dim light of smoke
of something other than fire
something other than the sound of flame
but my spark ignites dry ideas
and so absorbed    
burns

like timber and brush
waiting through the long night
for artificial tears
now I hear the drone
of the coming of a bird
all twirl of wing
filled and refilled with hope

outside I see how snow falls
just like these slate pieces of mountain pass
a piece of pine tree now flutters with air
then lands on one of the garden’s tomatoes
and the dry bark of the manzanita now floats
in a swimming pool     pulled towards the rapids
of a filtering machine
a backwash of mountain brush now smoky air
belched and groaning with the weight of so much fuel
comes to such an end
like I

as helplessly I paint a hose onto my green canvas
and watch
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From the Angeles National Forest fire of Sept. 2002.

© Copyright 2003 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-09-19 11:55 PM


Wow -- you had me holding my breath through this! Warn me if you write a long one like this...I could turn blue.

What a thing to live through! I've seen tornadoes, watched one coming, coming, and no place to hide....but somehow the memory of that pales in comparison to the vision of a wall of flame in the distance....

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Gemini
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2 posted 2003-09-20 12:18 PM


Such sad memories of a year ago, and history repeats itself now in the form of a hurricane.  My heart goes out to all of nature and wildlife who must endure this destruction.  Well penned.
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3 posted 2003-09-20 01:21 AM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Martie, it makesme cry to see many of Mother Nature's homes being affected by these tragedies, sweet friend, my heart goes out to all the victims of these fires and pray Nature herself can heal! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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4 posted 2003-09-20 01:25 AM



Martie...I remember this, and it brings back
memories of the big fire we had here last summer.

So much to appreciate, indeed...
thank you for the reminder.

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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5 posted 2003-09-20 01:53 AM


Martie, you made this so real...like I was looking
at a painting of the fires. It reminded of the fires
in Canada that Sharon recently told us about.
  
Very good writing, sweet lady,  
Hugs  
Ethel

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6 posted 2003-09-20 11:36 AM


Oh Martie this is so well done. I could see the flames, hear the crackle, smell the smoke. What a frightening thing to have suffered. Glad you shared this. Awesome piece.
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7 posted 2003-09-20 11:53 AM


Sis~
So real ... so very, very real~
Fear just all too familiar in the fire threats three years ago to my area~

Love ya' sweetie~
*Huglets*
~*Me

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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8 posted 2003-09-20 12:57 PM


I started to sneeze reading this, I think it was the smoke!

*smile*

Well done.

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9 posted 2003-09-20 10:02 PM


I grew up surrounded by woodsmen... who were called on to be firefighters when need arose. I remember bringing the oil to wipe away the black of soot... but didn't really understand what they faced... as much as I do reading your words. Excellent!
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10 posted 2003-09-20 10:06 PM


I placed seedlings in areas of the lost forests taken by fires back in the 60's....I loved the love of you then, in remembering, I more than admire the fact that you never forget...anything.

You...m'dear...are a very, very special person.

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11 posted 2003-09-29 07:28 PM


Martie - you show us the fire like no other can - Paul
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