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KoKo
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

0 posted 2003-09-19 05:06 PM


Why, when poetry is flowing
Deeply through me like
Liquid stars in the night sky,
Must poetry itself
Seem as a waist of time?

When words are screaming
For release
Unto the unsuspecting page
And slowly boiling, churning into
This hungry, silent rage...

I cannot seem to grasp the words
Lying just below the surface;
Minnows you could spend hours just
Reaching, grabbing nothing
Save the water that you drink
But means nothing to you now.

It feels as though
This page should burn
And all of those before it
And I just might have
If it had not suddenly seemed
That even that
Is a waist
Of precious air.

[Title Edited]

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (09-19-2003 10:14 PM).]

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Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
1 posted 2003-09-19 05:46 PM


Your frustration show in this one. Should that be 'waste' instead of 'waist' ?

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Ratleader
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Member Rara Avis
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass
2 posted 2003-09-19 05:47 PM


Well, I can understand the sentiment, having been there a time or fifty myself....

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (09-19-2003 07:31 PM).]

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2003-09-19 10:16 PM


KoKo, e-mail me re: edited title.

As for the poem?  It seems to be a rightful rage of age...and sage.  I see those minnows all the time.....

A good, venting write.  

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (09-19-2003 10:18 PM).]

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
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4 posted 2003-09-19 11:12 PM


..."when poetry is flowing
Deeply through me like
Liquid stars in the night sky,"

~ that is absolutely lovely!


EA

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