...Diary of a Shanty Town....(the end)

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QjQ
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0 posted 2003-09-19 01:59 AM

As she sets with memory's and a frown
on her face gazing at what was once just
a little shanty town now all in ashes

then abruptly she starts walking up the
road that leads to the interstate stopping
along the way to pick a few wild flowers
to place on her loved ones place of eternity

approaching the old rickety wooden
bridge she lingers day dreaming and
watching the water pass under flowing
on it's way carrying her reflections and
leaving her with images of past

then she hears in the distant the roar
of the bus groaning up the long hill
as she runs to catch the last bus for
the day carrying only one ole suit case
stuffed with all her possessions she
gets to the bus stop just in time

Then taking one last look back as she
enters the bus tears fall down her blush
cheeks and her heart pounds rapidly as
she sets by a man with a warm smile
as he helps her place her suit case away

he asks where you heading litl lady she
dries her tears smiles and says I'm going
to find my dreams

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[This message has been edited by QjQ (09-19-2003 02:39 AM).]

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

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1 posted 2003-09-19 02:13 AM

I could see every moment in this.

and I do thank you for obliging me by continuing the story.

A little bit of spit and grit in this, and I loved it.

(I still think there's a whole lotta story inbetween tho...grin)

thank you for this. Nice.

passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-09-19 03:36 AM

just wonderful Glenn!

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

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3 posted 2003-09-19 11:29 AM

Glenn, this was awesome...thank you for sharing a great and grand lesson...
smiles and hugs

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2003-09-19 12:17 PM

"along the way to pick a few wild flowers
to place on her loved ones place of eternity"

~ I can visualize it all in my mind's eye.

"approaching the old rickety wooden
bridge she lingers day dreaming and
watching the water pass under flowing
on it's way carrying her reflections and
leaving her with images of past"

~ Truly poetic

"he asks where you heading litl lady she
dries her tears smiles and says I'm going
to find my dreams"

~ Poignant ending to a moving story! Thank you for honoring the requests of your readers to continue the original poem!

EA

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19

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5 posted 2003-09-19 12:24 PM

This was great.Thanks for sharing a heartfelt story with us.

Crystal

Mystic One
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6 posted 2003-09-19 04:11 PM

Yes Nice

Mistletoe Angel

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7 posted 2003-09-19 04:40 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Awwwwwww, I wish it ended a bit happier though, dearest friend, as she's been through so much and though I'm happy to see her enthused in following her dreams, I wish she got more comfort and something special was salvaged from there! (sigh) This was a wonderful story, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Glenn, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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