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I am, Without
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I am, Without |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 I am, without. Every step of this day took me past others who drew their thoughts, wishes, desires, …fires… in the sand, and I, I drank in their intoxicating wordplay, luxuriated in their images, rolled around in assonance while clutching closely effective alliteration… a gasp or two escaped at innuendo and so sleight-of-hand maneuvers for well some filled my mind with their backlighting while others splayed stark signs of disquietude and unsettled hearts. I imagined a few of them, who still enjoy the luxury of scribbling with a fountain pen across some blank white sheet, fingertips inked slightly as wayward thoughts traipse in tip-toe talk, wondering whether or not to settle onto the white, and rest awhile, in gay array of a heart, now pleased. I am, without. Oh, I know what will happen, as it does…I shall ease my eyes away from the poets and their safe harbor kiss the flame goodbye, and in the search for Morpheus, ...hear my muse begin to mutter… but I am here, now. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Karilea...your muse is never far away!  I know what you mean about today... Hasn't there been some wonderful posts here at Passions?? Seems like every one I read today left me just speechless... but praying..."please muse...please!" Love this piece dear lady... My thoughts exactly! ~Smiles & Hugs from my muse to yours, Nancy~
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Wonderful write.. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea...Understanding this completely...interesting how the muse appears for a bit if we grumble about the time she spends away.  |
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MorninGlory Member
since 2003-08-30
Posts 175Oklahoma |
Touching poem, my friend, this is truly a beautiful poem, you always write with a lilt! Thank you. ~ becky |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice write  |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
...and now it's time for us to step carefully across your sand, read the things you've left there..... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Karilea, ahh this is brilliant . . . I drank in their intoxicating wordplay, luxuriated in their images, rolled around in assonance while clutching closely effective alliteration… you sneaky thing, you xxoo |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
KJ. This is very very good........and would you please pass back my fountain pen so that I can continue the scribbles upon my rumpled piece of paper...circa 1967... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh man I love this poem.... you wrote this for me, right? more like you wrote it about me...  LOLI am without muse more than with...... and days like this leave me wishing for some of what you all got.... very cool and poetically correct write Kari... me thinks you know just exactly where your muse is. "If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Well, ya know I love this one. Beautifully penned, lady. Hugs, ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This is so beautiful, just as is your heat and soul sweet friend. Crystal |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
A poem about the loss of one's muse inspires the writer's muse or vice versa? Kind of reminds me of what came first the chicken or the egg. Well written and most enjoyable! "If this grand panorama before me is what you call God...then God is not dead." |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
I drank in their intoxicating wordplay, luxuriated in their images, rolled around in assonance while clutching closely effective alliteration… This is heart quivering and enchanting. Thank you very much Iyad "Hallow the body as a temple to comeliness and sanctify the heart as a sacrifice to love; love recompenses the adorers." |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
a very stunning and beautiful write, your muse is certainly a good friend, and embraces you with a glowing brilliance of literature. How you have painted many lovely images..... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sunshine - and a wonderful muse you have. Now you must stop posting these graphics, at least until I learn how to do it, hehehe... BC |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Me thinks my muse (wherever she may be) needs to talk with your muse. Beautifully penned Karilea M fate is not just |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I have been without for a while now, Karilea. Oh my muse has attempted her cry on several occasions, but she is silenced by the demands of this world. "No time for words now." Soon I will no longer be able to quiet her as my own tears will bring her forth to the page. Until the time she becomes inescapable, I will continue to answer the world's cries and ignore my own. Sorry...see where you took me with this wonderful write! Patricia |
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