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Cardinal sacrifice
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Cardinal sacrifice |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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This morning, a cardinal Lay at my doorstep As if he had died, trying To enter this shack Dressed in hues of desire And dull as this yearning He lay there before me And told me a tale That he was drawn before sunrise To this spot in the darkness By the wails of our wanting And the long pleas of longing Compelled to the window By our cries of completion He impacted the glass Above our slow-cooling bodies And suffered, it seems His own “Petite Morte” Sacrificed to the notion of love He left us his gift of the wings The feathers of flight That held him aloft, drove him along So, half of them, I give to you That we each may devise Our own Icarus wings "In looking Northward, I see a light" [This message has been edited by wranx (09-16-2003 10:15 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Tomorrow when the red bird sings outside my window I will dry my eyes and come back to respond as I should. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...for some reason this poem made me cry...for all that is and for all that is not...and just because you said it so well!  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
If this were golf, you'd be on your way to a score of 18....... Excellence, Ed Ed ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Oh my, Ed... This had me in tears after the first few lines and then smiling through them at the end. Only you could take the death of a bird, and turn it into something so absolutely beautiful. What beauty, this, my friend... When the power of love overcomes the |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks friends, I wanted this to be better, less disjointed....But? t'will have to do. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'll keep this one in my loft, so if you change it, I'll know.  I should be so 'disjointed' in my thoughts and writes. this IS poetry |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
stunning... I am simply stunned. I read this while listening to Clarinet Concerto, Second Movement, (Mozart) (Coincidentally, ?smile? that is the last concerto he ever wrote...) If you don't have it, I will have to send it to you. I would love to give you something back for this.  Beautiful. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
Sacrificed to the notion of love He left us his gift of the wings The feathers of flight That held him aloft, drove him along So, half of them, I give to you That we each may devise Our own Icarus wings damn dude..... one of your best ...... |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This is definetly beautiful.I wish some of my thoughts came like this. Crystal |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sacrificed to the notion of love He left us his gift of the wings The feathers of flight That held him aloft, drove him along So, half of them, I give to you That we each may devise Our own Icarus wings Oh my Ed...this is superb, this is absolutely beautiful. only you can do this m'friend. one of your best. Keeping it. Maree  fate is not just |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Better? Remind me to take out some stock in Kleenex. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Dressed in hues of desire And dull as this yearning ================= That he was drawn before sunrise To this spot in the darkness By the wails of our wanting And the long pleas of longing Compelled to the window By our cries of completion He impacted the glass Above our slow-cooling bodies =============================== Sacrificed to the notion of love He left us his gift of the wings The feathers of flight That held him aloft, drove him along So, half of them, I give to you That we each may devise Our own Icarus wings ================================= one of the most unique writes I've read in awhile...exceptionally conceived. very well done poet sir. "If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Sacrificed to the notion of love He left us his gift of the wings The feathers of flight That held him aloft, drove him along" Just the notion? Susan |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I couldn't stay away from this one, Ed. This one MUST be printed and framed, with cardinal red matting and a genuine custom made wood frame to match the beauty of the write. |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
He left us his gift of the wings. I like this line, not quite sure why yet. But it seems to comes from the windings, of that which is to be. Nice Ed. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
How hot the Sun melted days of past drip-dropping cascades of molten tears imprinted eternal beneath me falling to my own death My demise . . . It seems I was this fragile creature determined and dutiful chasing the light finding the dark of reality Shedding my feathers in nakedness of purity for those I loved and love I now hold within my hands Crimson remnants of you to me transcended beyond this plane Not of this Earth but of . . . I bow, humbly to the heavens rejoicing in such gift bittersweet beauty and gather feathers lying about my feet carefully constructing them from one life given selflessly in order to create one life for two This is the most touching and eternal bit of your soul I am so grateful to witness . . . Edward Rose, you are one beautiful man xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (09-17-2003 01:03 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
When all the superlatives have been used.. may I simply say.. thank you for this masterpiece poet sir. ~Soft smiles, Nancy~
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
He left us his gift of the wings The feathers of flight That held him aloft, drove him along This isn't just one of YOUR best I've read... it's one of THE best I've read... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
wranx - you are amazing!! This is for certain a  and I am keepin' it! hugss, Chris"Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
so you opened the door and there was a father of the church laid out gasping from frustrated sexual need well its novel anyway -i@ll give you that arthur |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ah! You tricked me! I saw a Cardinal at first, not a bird! hahaha! Sweet, sweet poem, btw. Core |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks again! Good lord, my favorite people are all here... And Darlin' I see that you've received your half of his gift to us. Your poem above.....your gift to me. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
yes . . . and hold them dear to my heart thank you sweety |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You're beautiful.. both of you M fate is not just |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Finding the sun in yrselves. Awesome write, wranx. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
When I read the title, I thought I was in for a religious experience--and I was... Linda |
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