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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-09-16 01:40 AM


is it breeding or conditioning
that wears instinct to bone
and leaves me aching for the right words?

what good are prayers
in a mind where gods fear to tread
where everything I've ever done
and everything I'll ever be feels wrong?

sleep will not come
questions rape the silence of a lonely room
no apologies or explanations left
nights like these make it harder to breathe

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vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
1 posted 2003-09-16 01:43 AM



"sleep will not come
questions rape the silence of a lonely room
no apologies or explanations left
nights like these make it harder to breathe"


I've known those nights...and yes they do.
Very well said, Raph.
Hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2003-09-16 02:04 AM


"is it breeding or conditioning
that wears instinct to bone
and leaves me aching for the right words?

what good are prayers
in a mind where gods fear to tread
where everything I've ever done
and everything I'll ever be feels wrong?

sleep will not come
questions rape the silence of a lonely room
no apologies or explanations left
nights like these make it harder to breathe"

~ Honestly, Raph, I read your poem several times. You can write "heavy" like no other. I think I need to take a happy pill so I can go to sleep with a smile on my face--that way my dreams are sweet. lol

BTW, If you would like some happy pills, I'll give you some. They might work. I find them quite helpful at times.

You certainly can write well! It is so raw, so real, so solar plexus grabbing!

Loving, healing hugs,
Linda


Bonfirelight
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3 posted 2003-09-16 06:34 AM


thats wicked.
cheers

inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2003-09-16 07:00 AM


yes cheers,
have one on me
and kick out the demons for the night

Aenimal
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5 posted 2003-09-16 12:21 PM


thanks demons in full force lately
littlewing
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6 posted 2003-09-16 01:37 PM


ohh so hard to breathe . . .
thick stale pungent air . . .

everything I'll ever be feels wrong?
you know Raph . . . it always will until
one day (whenever that is) everything
just goes "CLICK"

loved this
xxoo

Nightshade
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just out of reach
7 posted 2003-09-16 01:59 PM


Sometimes for me..it is the daytime that I find hardest to take a deep breath.
Your thoughts invade mine my friend.
hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
            Emily Dickinson




    

Sunnyone
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8 posted 2003-09-16 02:45 PM


For some reason, I hear Jim Morrison belting out these words, and that's a compliment, my friend...(a big Doors fan here)...I like this, it has substance!  ~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~S~

Enchantress
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9 posted 2003-09-16 02:57 PM


...Damn!


~ I love your glances meeting mine
     across forever or the room ~

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
10 posted 2003-09-16 03:00 PM


well Sue i've heard the snap but not the click so far

Chris all hours of the day all hours..hugs

Sunnyone a compliment indeed trust me huuuuuuuge fan here too

Nancy grins thanks

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In Your Poetic Mind
11 posted 2003-09-16 03:53 PM


this is one of your best! your talent is really amazing....


Lauren~

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

Wind
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12 posted 2003-09-16 05:28 PM


ohh...I feel this. its like you can't sleep because..well I'm not sure why.

the mysterious
untreatable illness.

where we scream at ourselves and are left with silence..it gets scary.
of course...part of my reason is becasue I think they're you to get me

ahhh yes..the doors.
people are strange...

that why i larve u

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

Krawdad
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13 posted 2003-09-16 05:42 PM


Embrace the questions, Ae,
else they will linger on to haunt you . . .

"Be patient toward all that is unsolved in your heart and try to love the questions themselves...
Do not now seek the answers, which cannot be given to you because you will not be able to live them.
And the point is, to live everything.
Live the questions now.
Perhaps you will then gradually, without noticing it, live along some distant day into the answer."

Rainer Maria Rilke
"Letters To A Young Poet"

Kraw'

gemjop
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14 posted 2003-09-16 05:54 PM


Listen to Krawdad, he knows his onions!

sound advice.

this write, suffocates, shivers, the thought of wearing instinct away gave me the creeps.you sound mental and sane at the same time, nicely done.

what good are prayers
in a mind where gods fear to tread

I know yer not losing yer marbles, from this alone.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

SharaRose
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Somewhere out there~
15 posted 2003-09-16 06:01 PM


Have a little dialogue...I know there's a voice inside that will answer back (you know what I mean) that inner voice..listen to your inner being, and when it accuses you ask it why,, if it gives legit answers then work on them. Sort of like a re-evaluation, or taking inventory. No one's perfect so why should you be? Sounds as if you are the hardest on yourself. I don't know that, but it sure seems that way. Also darkness can't survive in the light. They don't mix. Hope things get better for you. And as for being so dark that no gods would tread..who hasn't been?

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Aenimal
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16 posted 2003-09-16 08:52 PM


Lauren means alot coming from you

I lubba you too Liz grins..sleep...sleep

Krawdad i know you're right of course, patience wears and in those moments of weakness these writes come. Thank you

gemma you've known me for awhile surely you know the marbles are long gone no? grins

my inner voice just ends up arguing with the other voices and then i can't get any sleep but thanks Shara for the read

Margherita
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Eternity
17 posted 2003-09-17 05:12 AM


Caro Raffaele, tu sei un poeta fantastico!

Great poetic performance! But I am sorry you feel like this …. may the sun break through! It always does!
Abbracci. Margherita


LeeJ
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18 posted 2003-09-17 08:04 AM


what good are prayers
in a mind where gods fear to tread
where everything I've ever done
and everything I'll ever be feels wrong?

maybe there is something that must be done or changed?  I dunno, but I do know that your writes are amazingingly penetrating filled with emotion and utterly honest, showing your caring heart craves a purity of sorts, an understanding.

Bless you and your muse, may you never stop penning

littlewing
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19 posted 2003-09-17 01:11 PM


sorry - the snap . . .
I actually smiled at that
(goodness, I need help)
but yes, I know
snap is wayy easier than the click

Ceinwyn
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20 posted 2003-09-18 09:36 AM


sorry that my magic wand is broken...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

vandana
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21 posted 2003-09-18 09:55 AM


enjoyed
Bill Charles
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22 posted 2003-09-18 10:56 AM


Aenimal - nights such as these haunt the soul, you write of them well...

BC

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