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MARK V SHELDON
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0 posted 2003-09-15 11:15 PM


On The Outside Looking In

Copyright 2003 by:  Mark V Sheldon


Across the lawn
behind the fence
where minds had gone
to recompense

A knotted tree
scraped on the pane
a melody
for the insane

The home was dark
the wind blew cold
the pathway stark
and cracked and old

The metal bars
could not contain
the hurt and scars
of fear and pain

The voices heard
as distant cries
without a word
you realize

As memories
come flooding in
you’re ill at ease
for where you’ve been…


You CAN make a difference:
http://educate-yourself.org/

© Copyright 2003 Mark V Sheldon - All Rights Reserved
mytuesdaywishes
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1 posted 2003-09-15 11:17 PM


amazing...there's such weight in your words. your invoke the deepest memories and there is no cure for nostalgia, you're right.


vlraynes
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2 posted 2003-09-15 11:23 PM



Mark...I love this!  Love the wording...
the flow...all of it.  Wonderfully done, sir.
Hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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3 posted 2003-09-15 11:27 PM




(sigh) And then isn't that why we have memories...to experience the nostalgua and remind ourselves piece-by-piece who we are, on this mission of exploring and collecting and finding relationships and connections between the parts? (big hugggsssssss) This is so well-said, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Mark, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

froggy
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4 posted 2003-09-15 11:43 PM


very beautiful Mr. Sheldon. I really liked this one.

:-)

ctowen
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5 posted 2003-09-15 11:48 PM


Sometimes it's hard to pick which is better ..

   outside looking in
          or

   inside looking out


                Can always count on you for a questionable answer!

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-09-16 11:43 AM


damn...this aches
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7 posted 2003-09-16 11:50 AM


As memories
come flooding in
you’re ill at ease
for where you’ve been…
or ill at ease for where you would be.. either way it works....


nice piece Mark.. the open way it frames a question or perspective lets the reader indeed choose for themselves what it all means to them..


enjoyed

MARK V SHELDON
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8 posted 2003-09-16 05:33 PM


mytuesdaywishes:  Thank you, kindly.  A "cure for notalgia"...  That's probably the only thing that should remain incureable;  as for bad memories...  I suppose they serve a purpose as well...

Vicky, I'm pleased it resonated with you -- I guess I'm getting into the Halloween spirit a little early this year...

Noah:  Agreed.  As the famous quote states:  "No matter where you go -- there you are."

Thanks, Froggy.

Craig:  Such is the beauty and mystery of words and subjectivity.  As long as one looks, one shall find, but it could be more than one bargained for...

Dixie, I suppose it could...

Thank you, Ron.  The choice will always remain the reader's...

-MVS

You CAN make a difference:
http://educate-yourself.org/

gemjop
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9 posted 2003-09-16 06:36 PM


You make me realise every bad memory, is just as important as the good. another great write Mark.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Earth Angel
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10 posted 2003-09-16 11:16 PM


That was an interesting view from "On The Outside Looking In"---and you accomplished this by using more words than usual! lol


EA

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (09-16-2003 11:16 PM).]

angelblueyes
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11 posted 2003-09-16 11:21 PM


WOW!!This ached but with a sense of meaning that everything has a reason and a place. Maybe that's why their memories to remember from time to time instead of keeping them fresh.This brought alot back, but also gave me alot to reflect upon.Thanks for shedding some light on some things.
Crystal

MARK V SHELDON
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12 posted 2003-09-17 08:37 AM


Gemma:  A great part is in the realization.  Thanks for stopping by.

EA, sometimes limitations can be stifling while other times, inspiring...  I guess it's all situational and based on perspective.

Crystal:  Always honored to stimulate, prod, and provoke.

-MVS

You CAN make a difference:
http://educate-yourself.org/

ctowen
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13 posted 2003-09-17 09:40 AM


Mark, its the ones we don't look for
       that hurt the most ...

           ... nothing like feeling BLINDSIDED!

        (always keep the reader involved)

Martie
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14 posted 2003-09-17 09:56 AM


Mark

A deep and meaningful expression using imagery to capture the emotion.  Well done!

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15 posted 2003-09-17 10:10 AM


The metal bars
could not contain
the hurt and scars
of fear and pain

The voices heard
as distant cries
without a word
you realize

this just sums it all up for me,
what an insightful write this morning Mark. thank you for sharing this gem.

KristieSue
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16 posted 2003-09-17 10:30 AM


very dark...very good :-)

"Vision without action is a daydream.  Action without vision is a nightmare." -Japanese Proverb
~ KS

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