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Ratleader
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0 posted 2003-09-14 10:35 AM


even your hair
softens
as if it
sleeps

drifts
across the
pillow
like shadows
of a dream

your
breath
a sigh,
soft as a
memory
of song

the curves
of you
half lit by the
moon glazed
window

they flow
motionless
vibrant
call me
like satin
even in
sleep

always
always I
see you so
know you
as I know
my heartbeat
in the
darkness

and know
even as I
know
that these are
wonders

joys of you
that

I will
never
see

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (09-14-2003 10:39 AM).]

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Duncan
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1 posted 2003-09-14 10:43 AM


"always
always I
see you so
know you
as I know
my heartbeat
in the
darkness"

You've captured a moment in this one that many will understand Ed.  Ethereal beauty...yes.  Excellent write!    

SharaRose
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2 posted 2003-09-14 10:47 AM


As if whispered. Beauty in form of words. Lovely!
Shara @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-09-14 10:52 AM


Ed, this is beautiful. I might just have to repost that one I wrote before about love being just beyond reach. Right?
Hugs to you, friend  
Ethel

Martie
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4 posted 2003-09-14 11:03 AM


Beautiful!!
nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2003-09-14 11:09 AM


very lovely, Ed... very romantic.

M

Sunshine
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6 posted 2003-09-14 11:09 AM


Imagination...

it's a wonderful
ability...

JilGirl
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7 posted 2003-09-14 11:44 AM


Lovely and romantic!
Sad that "she" shall
never be seen ~~
Perhaps she will?

'Tiz feathers that make the bird -
Always remember to keep them fluffed
but, never, EVER ruffle them!

passing shadows
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8 posted 2003-09-14 12:37 PM


purely romantic and sensual
1slick_lady
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9 posted 2003-09-14 12:37 PM


beautiful and sad...for her...h
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10 posted 2003-09-14 02:37 PM


always
always I
see you so
know you
as I know
my heartbeat
in the
darkness

First I was impressed by the ethereal beauty... and then by the heartbreak... both are quite powerfully woven into this superb poem... sheer excellence, my friend.

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