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Scrapbook The Moon (with Cpat Hair)

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Greeneyes
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0 posted 09-12-2003 02:17 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Greeneyes

Borders never quite pressed
shadows across these eyes
some dark veil, in corners of   day
to shield I's from corona flash
over edges of eclipsing thought
or frame these lips in  touch

The dark holds

wind sings in bluer tones chorded --

to midnight    I remember
watching light slip into a cold moon
unending through fingers,
and silver sliding
from tree tops
so many words left
palms facing upward

to be added page by page
so that memories saved like this
were   denied    the sting of eyes

Flash blurred -- tears cried on
offering such alms as
these fronds of me

so delicate the want
bend and seek the dream
up over the edge of the world
like storm clouds: the voice whispering
hauntingly: let me in,
soft orchid strokes brushing
gold silk
stretched to screen

"When I see the light again will your heart I read?"

Upwards palm in beg

I bleed

waiting between moment and memory
empty rain and echo's
the oceans rearrange their affairs

it's late now

rest

I will always belong to you


The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you




[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (09-12-2003 03:03 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 09-12-2003 02:22 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Oh, Lauren and Capt. Ron, this is so beautiful.
But with you two writing, I would never
expect any less.
I would have put a favorite verse, but I didn't
want to pick just one out.
Hugs to you both  
Ethel
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2 posted 09-12-2003 02:30 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel





(smiles) Yay! Oh Lauren and Ron, I just love this, dearest friends, Lauren, your wonderful imagery and Ron's fabulous narration both make an excellent photomontage of excellence! (big angel group hug) God Bless You, sweet friends, this is beautiful, I could see as the moon kept changing cycles a new picture or mirage was unraveled, yay, we all love you so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Lauren and Ron, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you both!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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3 posted 09-12-2003 02:43 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

After the loud sigh...
the sound you just heard was me throwing
my pens and notebooks out the window!
Absolutley amazing blending of pens here you two!!
Please say you will du-et again..?!
~Smiles & Hugs to you both, Nancy~

      ~ Summer can't be over...
   I still have sand in my shoes ~

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4 posted 09-12-2003 02:54 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Borders never quite pressed
shadows across these eyes
some dark veil, in corners of day
to shield I's from corona flash
over edges of eclipsing thought
or frame these lips in  touch

The dark holds

wind sings in bluer tones chorded --

to midnight I remember
watching light slip into a cold moon
unending through fingers
and silver sliding from tree tops
so many words left
palms facing upward

to be added page by page
so that memories saved like this
were denied the sting of eyes

Flash blurred-- tears cried on
offering such alms as
these fronds of me

so delicate the want
bend and seek the dream
up over the edge of the world
like storm clouds: the voice whispering
hauntingly: let me in,
soft orchid strokes brushing
gold silk
stretched to screen

"When I see the light again will your heart I read?"

Upwards palm in beg

I bleed

waiting between moment and memory
empty rain and echo's
the oceans rearrange their affairs

it's late now

rest

I will always belong to you


===========================


OMG.........................
I am in elation afterglow....
I am high with exquisite euphoria
I am moth giddy!!!
I am grateful to have witnessed this dueting...I got poetic tingles as soon as I saw the names...
I never wanted this one to end.....
my printer is turned on and Im finding a frame......

Lauren
Ron

"If you hear teardrops falling like rain on the rooftops ...
know what you're listening to ... is me missing you."

JH

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5 posted 09-12-2003 03:06 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Exquisite melding of poetic talent and heart!  Kudos to both of you!
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6 posted 09-12-2003 03:23 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

""When I see the light again will your heart I read?"

Upwards palm in beg

I bleed

waiting between moment and memory
empty rain and echo's
the oceans rearrange their affairs

it's late now

rest

I will always belong to you"

Reading this, I wonder why I bother trying to write at all.
Incredible you two...truly superb.
(Even if it did take me someplace I'd have rather not gone today.     
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7 posted 09-12-2003 03:42 PM       View Profile for Opeth   Email Opeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Opeth

I already know that Lauren can write poetry, but until now, I have not read any of Cpat's, although while meeting with Susan, she did tell me that he could write poetry very well.

Therefore, I found Lauren's style mixed with Cpat's - the result was like taking a great recipe and combining it with another outstanding recipe and yielding something completely different, yet excellent just the same. Does that make sense? lol.

Enjoyed!
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8 posted 09-12-2003 03:51 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

Perfect duet...absolutely seamless, the best of the best, from two of PIP's finest writers.

Encore!

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

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9 posted 09-12-2003 03:57 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

Kudos go to Ms Lauren.... it is her magic and talent that make this the piece it is. I simply stood by and handed her pens to write with... she did the rest, which, as usual is magic..

thank you all
and thank you Lauren for carrying me through the excersize.

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (09-12-2003 04:00 PM).]

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the ass-end of space


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in complete awe of this, two of pip's brightest..urgh..words..not...coming..description is futile
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11 posted 09-12-2003 04:27 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

Capt~
you give me far too much credit, as I would never have come up with these verses with out your pen....for that I am most thankful....thank you for your pen!!

~~~~~

I am so excited that each of you came in to read and give your heartfelt replies....it really makes writing and sharing worth it....

thank you all

MUWWWAAAHHHSSS and HUGSSS


Lauren~

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

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12 posted 09-12-2003 04:37 PM       View Profile for Opeth   Email Opeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Opeth

Is it just me or does anybody else feel that Lauren is feeling (besides looking) fine?

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Listening to every heart


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Well wrap this up with a silver bow
and put it under my Christmas tree...

Brava!  Bravo!
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14 posted 09-12-2003 07:16 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

nice duet
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15 posted 09-15-2003 11:57 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

over edges of eclipsing thought
or frame these lips in  touch

The dark holds

wind sings in bluer tones chorded

to midnight    I remember
watching light slip into a cold moon
unending through fingers,
and silver sliding from tree tops
so many words left
palms facing upward


=================================

I sooooooooooo needed to read this one again..


wind sings in bluer tones chorded --

*sigh*

(hoping you two will duet again)(moth begging)

"If you hear teardrops falling like rain on the rooftops ...
know what you're listening to ... is me missing you."

JH

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16 posted 09-15-2003 12:05 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

(chuckling) Moth... the greeneyed one has to decide on that...

but certainly glad you enjoyed...
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17 posted 10-09-2004 10:53 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

see ... me library is full of butterfly lovelies
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18 posted 07-29-2005 01:01 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

needed to read this gem again.

one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ...
~ take only memories ... leave only footprints ~

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