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James_A_Fraser
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Maginot Man

My walls are not down
but theyíre somehow
irrelevant, standing
proud and silly,
long after the invention of cannon.
Or rather perhaps theyíre
fixed
steady,
impregnable,
relentlessly guarding
the wrong place.

                                               I didnít expect you
                                                    from this direction
                                                         or with such
                                                             blinding speed.
                                                               Across my
                                                          spiritís northern flank
                                                    you sped without
                                              impedance
                                        and before I could
                                    respond
                             swift tanks
                        of you went
                    storming through
                my heart.

There were
no walls then,
no walls that
mattered,
maybe no walls
at all.

© Copyright 2003 James A. Fraser - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 09-12-2003 10:45 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


...no walls that
mattered...

~*~

Excellent, in presentation, thought, and process.
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2 posted 09-12-2003 10:48 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

thoughtful, intellegent..and well done.. Bravo!
Martie
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3 posted 09-12-2003 11:25 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Jamie

I think this is one of my favorites of yours, so far.  Very well done in form and thought!  
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4 posted 09-12-2003 11:50 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Jamie...this is my favourite from you thus far.
Wonderful words and presentation.
Much enjoyed the read.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

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                                                               Across my
                                                          spiritís northern flank
                                                    you sped without
                                              impedance
                                        and before I could
                                    respond
                             swift tanks
                        of you went
                    storming through
                my heart.

Some surprise attacks leave us with agony of defeat... others renew our souls and show us what living is all about.

This is simply superb.
JamesMichael
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6 posted 09-15-2003 01:21 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Excellent...I visited places of war in Verdun, France.  I remember one location where rifle barrels and bayonets were sticking from the ground where men were buried from artillery while waiting in the trenches...also visited surrounding areas that still had signs posted warning of unexploded ordinances...James
Paula Finn
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7 posted 09-15-2003 09:40 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

Oh James this is just wonderful...I,m glad you decided to post it
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8 posted 09-15-2003 10:12 AM       View Profile for KristieSue   Email KristieSue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit KristieSue's Home Page   View IP for KristieSue

this is awesome...

sometimes being blindsided is a good thing, and sometimes not...but at least you still know that your walls aren't permanent.

huggles

"Vision without action is a daydream.  Action without vision is a nightmare." -Japanese Proverb
~ KS

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9 posted 09-17-2003 10:29 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

I just wanted to read this again...nicely done
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10 posted 03-06-2004 09:09 AM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

James,

   I am taken by this inspired writing.  You know, the shape of this could be flanking troops or an "angel wing" on the left side.  Look at it:

                                                   I didnít expect you
                                                    from this direction
                                                         or with such
                                                             blinding speed.
                                                               Across my
                                                          spiritís northern flank
                                                    you sped without
                                              impedance
                                        and before I could
                                    respond
                             swift tanks
                        of you went
                    storming through
                my heart.


    Thank you for sharing this with us.  I can tell this is a very special piece.
                Sadie
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11 posted 10-08-2004 09:33 AM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

very nicely done, enjoyed this wall metaphor
passing shadows
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12 posted 04-28-2005 11:05 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

thank you for sharing this

I love it!

God only promises a safe landing, not a calm flight.


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13 posted 04-28-2005 02:42 PM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

Glad you put this back up to share. Terrific. marty
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14 posted 04-29-2005 12:44 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This never fails to leave tremendous impact...
 
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