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Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
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missouri

0 posted 2003-09-12 10:09 AM



There is life beyond these walls
where real people live real lives
where a hug is actually two arms
holding you tight, warm
breath stirring your hair, and
air squeezed right out of you.

There is life beyond these walls
where rain falls softly in the dawn
and you awaken to the sound
of snoring and the heat of
a living breathing body
next to you.

There is life beyond these walls
where real tears fall and are noticed
where someone asks you why
do you cry, are you happy,
are you sad, can I help,
what did I do?

There is life beyond these walls
one to be cherished and cultivated,
on to be joyous in, to creat in
something more than fantasies
and fairy tale dreams.

There is life beyond these walls.

© Copyright 2003 Paula Finn - All Rights Reserved
James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03
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1 posted 2003-09-12 10:34 AM


It is so. I have lived this very thing, and would have been moved by the thought even if your poem hadn't been so wonderfully written.

It's out there, it's waiting, and you can go out to it. Or as I did, wait and perhaps if you're infinitely lucky, it will come to you.

Reading this helped me decide to post a poem of my own about that very thing, one I wrote almost seven months ago but was never brave enough to post. It's called Maginot Man, and when I have it up, I'll come back here and give a link.

Thanks for both -- the poem, and the little extra bit of bravery.

There! I did it! Make my day! /pip/Forum81/HTML/002744.html


[This message has been edited by James_A_Fraser (09-12-2003 10:39 AM).]

Endlessecho
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since 2003-09-05
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I live within myself
2 posted 2003-09-12 10:41 AM


Beautiful!  It really got me thinking.  So much that I can't narrow down a response.  I can't help but thinking once you break out of your own walls, you have to enter into other walls that hold that life you describe.  Is the life really just outside myself?  I'll be contemplating this for awhile.  Thank you.
nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2003-09-12 11:04 AM


there is life beyond these walls...it's true

though sometimes the words created from the heart unseen...can touch and ease the pains, the hurts, the losses especially when one is alone.

Nicely written
Maureen


serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

4 posted 2003-09-12 02:12 PM


Awesome you.

I have to laugh though. It is precisely that life that keeps me running back to Pip time and time again.

Here, beyond the walls, if you tell someone you have had an epiphany they ask if it's malignant.



But I do understand--but I'm going to keep my internet angels awhile as I try to maintain some balance, yanno?

Hugs you. This aptly painted the aching reality of the long distance relationship.

All true and yes, sad. But sadder still, was doing without at ALL.

<--for what it's worth m'friend.

Love ya lady.

Ratleader
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5 posted 2003-09-12 03:46 PM


Come out! Come out! Jump if you have to!

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JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2003-09-15 01:24 AM


Perhaps time for the great escape...do not let a moment go by...James
Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
7 posted 2003-09-15 09:43 AM


I'm not meaning to say give up the friends you make here, or online elsewhere...but when you let "this" destroy relality theres something really wrong ya know?

And Karen? You are too silly girl...give this up? Not likely :P

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
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8 posted 2003-09-15 06:57 PM


Paula~

Tis true..there is life beyond these walls..

but just last week someone from here remembered something important going on with me...and asked about it....the guy that claims to love me forgot to even ask..

I love what is here...and what you wrote..

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