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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2003-09-11 08:50 PM



Barbed

I used it to sift through the rubble of my life,
those harsh words caught on the barbed edges
torn from the pressures imposed by the drink years.

The soft memories escape now through the
smallness of what you have become to me.
Each like a grain of sand, filtered out
the meaning strained and scattered
then left behind, trampled upon,
until even the coarseness cannot be owned.


M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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Larry C
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1 posted 2003-09-11 10:10 PM


M,
You always amaze me. So much accomplished in the two years I've been here. I am truly impressed everytime.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Krawdad
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2 posted 2003-09-11 10:13 PM


The sifting screens
some close some wide
can separate
silk-like fines
to slip a touch
and course grains
to massage in depth
and yet the blend
the blend
you are only in the blend.

Midnitesun
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3 posted 2003-09-11 10:16 PM


Making sandcastles again; but this time, I think I see you smiling, Maureen.

Cpat Hair
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4 posted 2003-09-12 09:51 AM


almost missed this one....

like the approach and the thoughts..the metaphor presented concisely and an effective mix with the title...

you did good!!! Very good!

so many good offerings to my silly challenge.... each I open and read an amazing take on a simple idea that is blended into the writers own life experience or interpretation...

I certainly enjoyed your take on this...

thank you

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