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Mistletoe Angel
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0 posted 2003-09-11 04:20 AM


(This is a new song I wrote in memory of everyone afflicted by September 11th! It builds up as acoustic, with acoustic/electric choruses, then explodes in the end with a catharsis of emotion, until slowly fading in the end with the soft words "wave goodbye"



Shorter Distances Between Shoulders
By: Noah Eaton
9/11/03
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...As the dust settles
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...as the horizons are congested
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...with freeways of silver wings
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...all bound for the gates of heaven,
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...I can still see fifty stars
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...printed on the flag through my tears
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...but when I see my mother crying
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...listening to the news
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...I know within the stars there's too many other stars...
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...Because as the concrete clouds drift away
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...as the smoke lifts from our eyes
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...you can see the shortest distance between shoulders
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...as fathers embrace their daughters tight.
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...Waving goodbye...
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...in fondest memory...
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...How can I turn away,
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...how can I cover my ears
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...all these precious faces,
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...with all their precious tears.
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...I saw the phoenix rise in the west
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...high above the tallest skyscrapers
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...scattering dandelion seeds
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...scattering answered prayers
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...Because as the concrete clouds drift away
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...as the smoke lifts from our eyes
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...you can see the shortest distance between shoulders
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...as fathers embrace their daughters tight.
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...And this morning we'll kneel in the broken glass
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...so together we can cry
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...And tonight we'll flood our rooms with candlelight
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...so these angels can see our tears shine
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...Waving goodbye...

...in fondest memory...
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...Through these windows of the world
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...through the blood on the silver spoon
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...I perceive an invisible incandescense
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...from all four directions seeping through.
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...Thunder on a sunny day,
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...calmed over by an ocean breeze,
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...and now I find myself, Oh Lord,
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...bending down on my knees...
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...Because as the concrete clouds drift away
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...as the smoke lifts from our eyes
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...you can see the shortest distance between shoulders
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...as fathers embrace their daughters tight.
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...And this morning we'll kneel in the broken glass
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...so together we can cry
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...And tonight we'll flood our rooms with candlelight
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...so these angels can see our tears shine
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...Waving goodbye...
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Shine a little light in your room,
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so they can see your tears shine
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Shine a little light in your room,
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WAVE GOODBYE...
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Tonight, shine a little light
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Let your tears shine
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WAVE GOODBYE...
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Tonight, we can cry
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Tomorrow, we can rise, we can
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WAVE GOODBYE...
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Tonight we can cry...
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and tomorrow...
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...wave goodbye...
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wave goodbye...
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wave goodbye...
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wave goodbye...
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wave goodbye...
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(In Memory Of All of America's Angels...You Will Never Be Forgotten!)


I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (09-11-2003 01:37 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Nadia Lockheart - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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1 posted 2003-09-11 04:25 AM


Noah,
This was simply awesome!
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



vlraynes
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2 posted 2003-09-11 04:25 AM



Oh my...this gave me chills, Noah...

I'm left without words...

Thank you for sharing this.

If you judge people, you have no time to love them.
--Mother Teresa

vandana
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3 posted 2003-09-11 09:43 AM


(hugs)
Ceinwyn
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4 posted 2003-09-11 11:15 AM


god bless you sweet Noah....
QjQ
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5 posted 2003-09-11 11:21 AM


terrific,,,

                   

Sunnyone
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6 posted 2003-09-11 12:05 PM


Little Brother, you are the one with the beautiful heart!!! As a musician too, I hear the melody, and feel the changes...and the music reaches out and touches us...thank you for this gift, Noah...~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

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7 posted 2003-09-11 12:20 PM


Hanky alert.....but I knew from your pen angels would grace these pages....Peace....may we never forget those we wave goodbye to....
Lauren~

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

Corinne
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8 posted 2003-09-11 12:38 PM


Well said, friend.

Corinne

Janette
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9 posted 2003-09-11 10:55 PM


Clap   Clap   Clap

Bravo!

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2003-09-16 05:34 AM


You say it well...James
Aimster
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11 posted 2003-09-16 07:38 PM


noah,

you have a remarkable talent both as
a writer and obviously as a musician.
this was so powerful, I felt it with every
vibe of my being. such an awesome song! May those that fell on that fateful day indeed
never be forgotten!!
Take care.
Amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

Lotus Breeze
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12 posted 2003-09-16 07:42 PM


You fill page with emotion, wish could hear too
Suetang
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13 posted 2003-09-17 11:31 PM


Hello Noah

I felt so many emotions when I read your beautiful and very touching words.  I am so glad I got to read this.  I have just written a poem in memory of the lives lost at the Sari Club in Bali last October and I will post it on the first anniversary.

"We are all angels with only one wing......
we can fly only by embracing each other."

Take care.......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Susan Caldwell
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14 posted 2003-09-17 11:40 PM


Noah~

I don't reply enough to your writing.. but I do read and I do recognize talent.

You are a sweet, wonderful soul.

Susan

Earth Angel
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15 posted 2003-09-18 12:05 PM




Noah, a wonderful piece of soulful writing. It was a very emotional read, Dear One. Bless you for using your gift this way.


EA

SharaRose
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16 posted 2003-09-18 12:22 PM




Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

[This message has been edited by SharaRose (09-18-2003 12:23 AM).]

angelblueyes
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17 posted 2003-09-18 02:00 AM


Oh sweet friend, I feel your deep heart and soul in this.Sadness, rememberance, and a time of sharing.My sincerest angel hugs go out to you
May the world always remember the sweet angels that were sent above.
Crystal

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