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Open Poetry #28

walls (for "him")

ShannonMarie
Member

since 2003-09-09

Posts 55
in a state of being

0 posted 2003-09-10 02:14 PM

I've built this wall around me,
so no one can get in.
I've let it down once before,
and the pain came back again.

So I sit in solitude,
alone, tears flowing like rain.
waiting for the flood to rush over me,
drowning in my pain.

Then I saw you,
like a gentle breeze,
you dried the rain up like the sun,
and put my mind at ease.

your hands were warm,
like autums gentle wind,
you broke the wall piece by piece,
and let the sunlight in.

My world is no longer dark,
and the sky is no longer grey,
a love came for all seasons,
and took the pain away.

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

1 posted 2003-09-10 03:30 PM

I love the theme of this one...and the fact that you showed vulnerability, but still kept the door open to new love. Great write, and much enjoyed...~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2003-09-10 03:31 PM

Very pretty write.
Welcome to Passions
ThisDiamond

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2003-09-10 09:45 PM

Very Sweet.

Welcome!

Susan

Lotus Breeze
Member

since 2003-09-06

Posts 112

4 posted 2003-09-10 10:12 PM

Flood wall needed not when tears stop
I like poem much

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

5 posted 2003-09-10 10:23 PM

I don't think I've read you before, so I'd like to welcome you to Passion's.This was a good write.

Crystal

ShannonMarie
Member

since 2003-09-09

Posts 55
in a state of being

6 posted 2003-09-10 10:40 PM

thank you all for being so nice about my poetry.. I was a little scared to write it out in the open, but I am glad I did *hugs* thanks again.

Shannon Marie

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