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ShannonMarie
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since 2003-09-09
Posts 55
in a state of being

0 posted 2003-09-10 08:21 AM



Sometimes I see myself and I am a girl,
A child who has not yet....
experienced the cold, harsh world.

Sometimes I see myself and I am strong,
never a care or a fear....
I have always known right from wrong.

Sometimes I see myself and I am weak,
like a scared child that shutters
when lightning and thunder crashes...
too afraid to speak.

Sometimes I see myself and I am smart,
a casual smile from me....
and it melts your heart.

Sometimes I see myself and I have grown old,
remembering the stories of my life...
hidden feelings that I have never told.

Sometimes I see myself and I am sad,
neglected, forgotten, and pushed out
cry out for the comfort that I needed...
something that I never had.

Sometimes I see myself and I am good,
happy, funny, a straight A student..
I have always done as I should.

Sometimes I see myself and I'm in a love thats true,
as I discover my feelings
they grow stronger....
I love and would never hurt you.

Sometimes I see myself and I am me,
a girl, strong, weak, smart,
old, sad, good, and in love
I am beautiful...
as I see.

love like you will never be hurt

© Copyright 2003 Shannon Marie - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-09-10 08:34 AM


Shannon, what immeditaely came to mind is a tune by Bob Dylan where he sings/writes:

"She aches . . . just like a woman . . .
yes she does, well she takes  . . . just like a woman , yes she does, well she makes love just like a woman . . . but she breaks, just like a little girl."

Beautiful writing and yes, always
xxoo

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
2 posted 2003-09-10 08:42 AM


ShannonMarie, I am looking at you--and I like what I see! A young woman who is strong, smart, good, loving, beautiful--and talented!!!

~ and btw, I love your name!--as it made up of my daughter's and my sister's names!

Warm, welcoming hugs,
Earth Angel

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (09-10-2003 08:43 AM).]

Kahlil
Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881

3 posted 2003-09-10 08:48 AM


Shannon:  Dylan's "Just like a woman" came to my mind, too, nice write.  Welcome to Passions!  ~K~
ShannonMarie
Member
since 2003-09-09
Posts 55
in a state of being
4 posted 2003-09-10 09:00 AM


I have never heard that song, but I guess I will have to find it and listen now.. thanks for your comments.
James_A_Fraser
Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines
5 posted 2003-09-10 10:18 AM


I see you, and you're going places....anybody with a mind and a viewpoint like yours simply has to.


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