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QjQ
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since 2003-04-18
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0 posted 2003-09-09 09:16 AM



Is it because love has unknown
abilities that has romantically
prisoned my heart

for you now have my heart full
of  happiness that my senses
cannot explain

I feel entrapped within you and
your body is signaling my senses

to rhythm with the tunes of a
unknown chord

my body is tranquilized by this
chord and has lost motion

will you teach me

               

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gringakiwi
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since 2003-08-05
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1 posted 2003-09-09 09:44 AM


This is my favourite bit!:

"Is it because love has unknown
abilities that has romantically
prisoned my heart

for you now have my heart full
of  happiness that my senses
cannot explain"

This is so romantic, I hope that you have given this poem to the person who has inspired it! Once again, I salute you!
Connie
xx

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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2 posted 2003-09-09 09:53 AM


"for you now have my heart full
of  happiness that my senses
cannot explain"

~ Ah! ~ the sweet mysteries of love...

Q-Man, you really tugged my harp strings with this beautiful piece of writing!


EA

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
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3 posted 2003-09-09 10:46 AM


"I feel entrapped within you and
your body is signaling my senses"

Perfect!



Susan

garysgirl
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4 posted 2003-09-09 11:02 AM


Glenn, I think this is my favorite of yours.
It's a for me...hope you don't mind.  
Hugs to you  
Ethel

Enchantress
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5 posted 2003-09-09 11:08 AM


Perfectly penned...a beauty!
One of your best Glenn.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

      ~ Summer can't be over...
   I still have sand in my shoes ~

JilGirl
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since 2003-05-24
Posts 364
Washington
6 posted 2003-09-09 10:46 PM


Excellent!
You definitely have a flare
for writing romance!

Keep on posting, Mr. Romance!
(LoL)

'Tiz feathers that make the bird -
Always remember to keep them fluffed
but, never, EVER ruffle them!

SharaRose
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since 2003-07-19
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Somewhere out there~
7 posted 2003-09-09 10:56 PM


will you teach me

I loved this most of all...


SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148
Oklahoma
8 posted 2003-09-09 11:05 PM


I was going to quote a favorite part, but I love the whole thing.It's you through and through.I have to agree with Shararose though the best was will you teach me.
Crystal

El_Campeador
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since 2003-01-29
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Ohio, USA
9 posted 2003-09-10 07:53 AM


Glenn, I like this one. Keep writing, you're getting really good...

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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New York
10 posted 2003-09-10 08:45 AM


Q - this has got to be the most intimate and self-recognized statement one can  make and ask for to another:

will you teach me

beautiful, in itself
xxoo

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
11 posted 2003-09-10 09:03 AM


QjQ
Well you sure got the girls on this one.
Enjoyed.

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