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Kahlil
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0 posted 2003-09-07 05:22 PM



“Everything’s fine”
no wonder you played and stayed
as long as you did...
and did you think
I was unaware of
the brew beneath the lid?

Struggling with issues
and doubting myself, it seems
everything’s out of sync;
every emotion
is stuck in my head...
orange and yellow and pink.

Indecision, anxiety, fear....
in the doorway
of stay or go;  
can’t decide, and it makes me cringe
at these words
that I've come to know.

The pact between us
once stronger than vows;
we’ve forgotten what “love you” means.
How long had it been missing
before you decided  
that I should leave?

“Work on it, everything
is just fine”
I hold my head in my hands.
What made me stay
as long as I did
guarding the old golden bands...

watching them slip from our hands...

counting the years in the sands...


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Kaoru
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1 posted 2003-09-07 05:23 PM


This is sad..
Wonderfully penned..

Magnus
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2 posted 2003-09-07 05:30 PM


Sending you a hug!
MorninGlory
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3 posted 2003-09-07 05:33 PM


Such a tender write about something that wounds so deep. Takes time for those scars to heal. You are in my prayers.

becky

angelblueyes
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4 posted 2003-09-07 05:43 PM


Such a soft write about something so sad.
Crystal

gemjop
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5 posted 2003-09-07 05:59 PM


“Work on it, everything
is just fine”
I hold my head in my hands.
What made me stay
as long as I did


wow, keeping this. so many great lines.made me think of the beatles song, we can work it out. my ex used to refer to this song, saying we could always work it out, and when we did need to? he made no effort. forgot the promise HE made ME make.

hugssssssssssssss.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Kahlil
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6 posted 2003-09-07 06:09 PM


Kaoru - thank you, as you know...
Magnus - I needed that, and hugs back to you!
MorninGlory - I never turn down a prayer,  
              bless you.
Angel - Thank you, hugs to you.
Gemma - your comments are right on, thanks  
        for the hugs, and I'm hugging you,
        too

All of you are special, wonderful people...
thank you.

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