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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-09-07 09:50 AM



Sleep wavered, bubbling thoughts
limbs sunk delicious soft
into clean sheets and midnight

Somehow
in such meditative state
you still snapped me out

Bones hardened, shallow breath became
tight
for the first time

heart solid

If human, it would seem,
mind tapped heart gently on shoulder
and awoke it from dream

It won't wait in fairytale scenario
a moment longer
excuses, apologies, explanations

I no longer wish for.




Instant karma's gonna get you.

[This message has been edited by gemjop (09-07-2003 09:53 AM).]

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QjQ
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1 posted 2003-09-07 09:55 AM


very good write n read,,,

       

Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2003-09-07 02:36 PM


I don't wish for them anymore either...

Enjoyed.

Susan

Wind
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3 posted 2003-09-07 03:12 PM


you have more saddness than you deserve though I enjoy reading it.

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

vlraynes
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4 posted 2003-09-07 03:14 PM



Gemma...this just hurts...
Big hugs,
~Vicky

If you judge people, you have no time to love them.
--Mother Teresa

Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
5 posted 2003-09-07 05:22 PM


..sigh
VAS
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6 posted 2003-09-07 05:31 PM


yeah

well done pain!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

angelblueyes
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7 posted 2003-09-07 05:52 PM


So sad my frined May your days be filled with the rays of heavenly light.
Crystal

inkedgoddess
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8 posted 2003-09-07 10:57 PM


If human, it would seem,
mind tapped heart gently on shoulder
and awoke it from dream

tell the mind to go back to  sleep, i want to dream a bit more
very good poetry here, gemma

Cpat Hair
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9 posted 2003-09-08 09:28 AM


Somehow
in such meditative state
you still snapped me out

Bones hardened, shallow breath became
tight
for the first time

heart solid
very nice passage here... one that grips and tugs at the same time....


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