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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2003-09-07 09:19 AM


Balance

After February
I didn’t hear from you much
But I made sure you heard from me

Pathetic
I wrote for you
I emailed you
But I didn’t call

That is where I drew the line

In May two things happened
You came over
To help me with something
I cooked for you

And you told me
You had gotten married
That it happened fast
And you were happy

I smiled
Told you I was happy for you
And wished you well

As you were driving home
I ran to get to
my bathroom before
losing balance

in break


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littlewing
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1 posted 2003-09-07 09:25 AM


aghhh you are writing my life . . .
OMG . . . Susan! I knowwwww this so so well
goodness, gave me chills . . .
Go smile at yourself please
no, ok here . . . have a friend in London and whenever I feel just absolutely awful
he says this to me (it is a routine)
he says:  Darling. what do you see when you look in the mirror?
My response:  Myself, looking absolutely gorgeous

Ok this doesnt always work, but it sure as hell makes me laugh
*smile*
xxoo  

gemjop
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2 posted 2003-09-07 09:35 AM


wooo hooo, another chapter!

the ending oh, god, i know that feeling, when the door closes, the calm lie crumbles, and so do you.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

QjQ
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3 posted 2003-09-07 10:06 AM


the story has came to end with such greif,,

very well expressed,,

       

Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2003-09-07 10:34 AM


Sue~I love that and will try it the next time I feel awful...thank you!

Gemma~lol have to wait for the door to close don't want him to see us cry...thank you.

Q~Feelings like that never go away...so she puts it somewhere and tries to go on...thank you..

Susan

Opeth
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5 posted 2003-09-10 11:20 AM


I smiled
Told you I was happy for you
And wished you well

As you were driving home
I ran to get to
my bathroom before
losing balance


~ Wow. I could feel what you were going through as if it were me. Painfully good.

Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-09-10 11:55 AM


Thank you Mike..

How's the hangar move going?

Opeth
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7 posted 2003-09-10 12:55 PM


We are staying prety much busy. After this weekend, it is going to get much more hectic, all the way until we finally begin to move out on the 19/20/21 September.

I hope all is well with you, Susan.

passing shadows
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8 posted 2003-09-10 01:05 PM


Susan, i say (in the words i can use here on this site) forget him! he's not worthy of you ladybug.
Susan Caldwell
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9 posted 2003-09-10 01:13 PM


Mike~I don't have the hagar projects, but I keep up on what is going on...lol...so, ah, good luck!

Dixie~Thank you,   I just wish it was that easy, sometimes someone gets in your blood and you have to chew your own arm off to get out of the trap....I haven't even began to start chewing yet...

Susan

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10 posted 2003-09-10 03:58 PM


Ow....I was that guy, one time.....and would never be again. Now I know how hard the easy way can be, though to see it you have to be man enough to think of both halves.

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Sunnyone
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11 posted 2003-09-10 04:20 PM


Have you ever heard the expression: 'Parallel Lives?'  Well, after reading this one, I think maybe there is something to it...boy do I know the feelings you put into this!!!!  Great write...on to Chapter 11...~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

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