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Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

0 posted 2003-09-06 07:18 PM

                              Whirlwinds
                         and skyscrapers
                      senseless thoughts
                        and endless seas

                I wish that I could wake
                    from this ugly dream
             I wish I could rest my head
                        to sleep forever

      and shut out all the angry screams

                                       hollow boned
                                       and empty-brained
                                       dead ends
                                       and one way streets

             Smog to save me from the light,
             ultraviolet touch
             and wishing that you knew

             There would be fire
             but knowledge put it out.

Feathers and fur
   to shelter me
      from winds
  and angry eyes,
          stones
  and ammunition

         Memory is a senseless thought
                but I still find a way.
               I work my way back home
               to the place I was born

                                      songs to sing
                                      me to sleep
                                      without mournful lullabyes
       City streets
  and crowded roads,
     nameless faces
and faceless names

                             The city is underwater,
                             somewhere where I cannot breathe

      Broken windows
      and boarded doors,
      alley cats
      and superstitions

   save the birds
and bring me home

insanity is not a crime

[This message has been edited by Wind (09-06-2003 07:36 PM).]

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

1 posted 2003-09-06 08:07 PM

Smog to save me from the light,
             ultraviolet touch
             and wishing that you knew

             There would be fire
             but knowledge put it out.

You rule. The title, the theme, the thoughts, the presentation.

I had to quote that bit though, it was my favourite: there would be fire, but knowledge to put it out.

Thankyou for posting, you've made my night

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

2 posted 2003-09-06 08:12 PM

and you made mine, lets say we're even

insanity is not a crime

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

3 posted 2003-09-06 09:00 PM

"City streets
  and crowded roads,
     nameless faces
and faceless names

                             The city is underwater,
                             somewhere where I cannot breathe

      Broken windows
      and boarded doors,
      alley cats
      and superstitions

   save the birds
and bring me home"

Damn..
this is good.

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

4 posted 2003-09-06 09:24 PM

thanks Meg, this one's from my journal, but I had to take out a few of my 'sentence inhancers'

lol...

so..yeah. I appriciate it

insanity is not a crime

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2003-09-06 09:28 PM

Liz, I've said it before,
I will say it again...

you're a young girl in an old soul.

Very well done!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-09-07 03:13 AM

I think too many times people focus on your age and i admit there had been times when i said wow and she's only __. But old young it doesnt matter, you're a brilliant writer regardless of age and one of PIP's best

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2003-09-07 03:42 AM

brilliant! just an awesome piece here, love the last lines

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

8 posted 2003-09-07 04:09 AM

This is an excellent write, Liz...I love it!
VERY well done.
Hugs,
~Vicky

If you judge people, you have no time to love them.
--Mother Teresa
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (09-07-2003 04:10 AM).]

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

9 posted 2003-09-07 09:32 AM

I do believe that you must have had more incarnations than there are grains of sand on the beaches of planet Earth! There is so much depth and wisdom to your poetry. This could only come from someone whose experience spanned a far greater number of years than you have lived in your young life.

EA

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

10 posted 2003-09-07 09:50 AM

Suberb writing...and thoughts

Susan

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

11 posted 2003-09-07 11:16 AM

umm thanks sunshine...

Raph- yeah..it feels like that a lot but thats what I l#ve about you..ya treat me like an equal and not a child that needs to have everything sugar coated. and plus guys, I'm almost 15, its not that young.

PS- glad you liked that part

Vicky- thank ya sweetie

EA- thanks, I'm glad you think that.

thank you too susan

insanity is not a crime

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

12 posted 2003-09-08 12:03 PM

Ah yes, the shrapnel in the sky.
(don't ask me, I'm operating on little sleep

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