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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-09-06 02:59 AM


Another night
is swallowed..
Wasted in a pile
of
yesterdays.

I've put my hand
over the face of time,
discovered that
there wasn't any left..

I wait again for
my hollow breathe to proceed.

I could drink a thousand rivers
but this
dryness
would never leave.

For without you,
there is no weather..
There is no sun
to blind my eyes.

I want to
wish back
to when I could fathom
you
lightly running your hands
on my cheeks
taking away
my sadness
helping me
breathe.

I imagine
as pianos burn
the songs
burn along with them..

no strain
of waterfall,
nor weeping
leaf..
tonight
wouldn't allow you
to
save me..

i don't think i'll ever
stop to
begin again..
on freezing nights
i crack
the ice of
the sky
and hope
you're here
next to me
when I
open my eyes..

I've swallowed
millions
of storms,
let you sleep
while
i
gave the world rain
and
my heart
to you.

© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
QjQ
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1 posted 2003-09-06 03:19 AM


this is just so heart felt,,
you have expressed it so well,,,

                


Kethry
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2 posted 2003-09-06 03:28 AM


Wow! elementally powerful.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
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3 posted 2003-09-06 03:40 AM


And you prove me right with the very next of yours.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

HopeS
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4 posted 2003-09-06 06:06 AM


A very heartfelt emotional outpouring
Hope

heartpiper
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5 posted 2003-09-06 07:27 AM


Kaoru

You have touched the strings of the “lute “ and made it throb deeply, and passionately.

You have swallowed the springs of emotions and gave the world the rain and gave him the heart.

This creative.
I can see a great amount of emotions seeded here
I see plenty of meadows
And I see you deeply drawing your heart on the “oak trees” to allow sparrows come and sing in delight.

I admire the sculpture of beauty that you've built here.

Best wishes
Iyad



"Hallow the body as a temple to comeliness and sanctify the heart as a sacrifice to love; love recompenses the adorers."
Khalil Gibran

[This message has been edited by heartpiper (09-06-2003 07:28 AM).]

littlewing
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6 posted 2003-09-06 07:45 AM


Meg,

have you any idea how much is right here:

I imagine
as pianos burn
the songs
burn along with them..

mann . . . yes . . .
'Tis a fool to sleep through your song
Beautiful writing
xxoo  

1slick_lady
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7 posted 2003-09-06 07:49 AM


meg i tried to pick a line i really liked best but this is so full of glitter they all showered me ...helen
SharaRose
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8 posted 2003-09-06 09:33 AM


Pensive, and melacholy feelings really are strong when I read this. So sad. Made me want to cry for you. :'(

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

gemjop
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9 posted 2003-09-06 09:41 AM


I've put my hand
over the face of time,


It's so strange to think that every day, we seem to be living the same thoughts, and emotions. Comforting, but it makes me so angry, to think we could wait forever for words from them, that would likely make no difference, and yet we wait, and long.

There are so many lines here, that say it so much better than i ever could.

so, thanks.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 2003-09-06 09:50 AM


Meg~

Thank you I needed this to....

I love how you write...

Susan

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