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Lisann
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0 posted 2003-09-05 11:32 PM



I entered through the glass doors
As i've done so many times before,
Knowing i'd have to face my "friend"
As i'd done each day before.

But now things are so much different
Our relationship has changed
So many unanswered questions
The hurt inside remains.

How could we let this happen?
How could we let it fall apart?
How could we lose our friendship?
When there's still so much love in my heart.

It seems so very long ago,
That you and i had first met
We tread upon this "friendship path"
Our direction together was set.

But somehow along that path
We seemed to lose our way,
We lost that special connection
Not knowing what to say.

There are no words possible
To describe the pain i feel inside
Except to say when i lost you friend
A part of my heart died.

I wish you all the best in life
All the love that you can find,
Please know that you will always be
Within my heart and mind.
I love you ..............and I miss you.

© Copyright 2003 Lisann - All Rights Reserved
icebox
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in the shadows
1 posted 2003-09-06 12:32 PM


Broken Toys And Pretty Ribbons
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2 posted 2003-09-06 01:51 AM


When Hurt Remains?  Boy what a familiar story you are telling here, I am sure you are not alone in having been through this.
Kethry
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3 posted 2003-09-06 01:59 AM


Maybe you could call it "Friendship's Slide"
but whatever you call it it deserves recognition. Good work
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Jeremiah Johnson
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Brooksville, Fl, U.S
4 posted 2003-09-06 05:12 AM


this is a great piece of art. as for a title i'm kind of lost there myself. i believe something to do with friendship would work. like "friendship of pain" keep it up and i hope to read more from you soon.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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5 posted 2003-09-06 05:13 AM


Lisann...This is a real good poem. I enjoyed the tenderness of it...Paul

For a title: Glass Heart

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

Lisann
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6 posted 2003-09-06 11:42 PM


Thank you all for reading.........and Paul......Glass heart......I like that.  Simple.....but that is precisely what it feels like.
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