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Martie
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0 posted 2003-09-03 10:11 PM


And there is so far to go
before the beginning and the owl’s watch
across the woods it seems is fair
and all the little things are there
so far so far

To find the expanse of air
and sing   oh I know how
it comes up from the heart to start
and warbles greenly filled and stilled
can’t find a name to make a title
above the place where sound travels
can’t find the syncopation right
feel it flood me in the night
then soon as time turns down the dark
it’s gone like white wine in the park

And there is so far to go
to the end of this you know
all fluttered and gaining wing
I hide in underneath of things
waiting for the wind that’s mine
around about and under rhyme

Catch me can you see the cloth
I wear in color magic gloss at last to see
the beams of trees below the fastest part of me
less the stumble rock of air
will know the me so hard placed there

So touch this substance known as real
and kiss the doubt off cold then seal
with all the little things out there
so far so far

[This message has been edited by Martie (09-04-2003 09:30 AM).]

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kaleanna
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1 posted 2003-09-03 10:12 PM


good write
good read

Meesh

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2 posted 2003-09-03 11:57 PM


"And there is so far to go
to the end of this you know..."

Well...yes, it's true.

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3 posted 2003-09-04 12:02 PM


A good write here.
Crystal

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4 posted 2003-09-04 01:16 AM


Magic. You write magic, weave it into a carpet, and take us for a ride.....

Thank you for this, and for all the others.

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5 posted 2003-09-04 09:22 AM


Sis~
To be allowed the privilege of reading you is worth more than I could ever tell you~

'And there is so far to go
to the end of this you know
all fluttered and gaining wing
I hide in underneath of things
waiting for the wind that’s mine
around about and under rhyme'


And I shall always look for the winging of your rhyme~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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6 posted 2003-09-04 09:26 AM


What Ed said...
And, this is so YOU dear Martie...
You write so beautifully...seemingly effortlessly.
One day...teach me how you do this...magic?
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

      ~ Summer can't be over...
  I still have the sand in my shoes ~

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7 posted 2003-09-04 09:35 AM


Martie
Your poetry to me is like following Alice in wonderland.

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8 posted 2003-09-04 10:38 AM


Martie - I read your poetry and you take me to places I only get access to when I read you.  This great - just great!  Paul
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9 posted 2003-09-04 10:43 AM


"I hide in underneath of things
waiting for the wind that’s mine
around about and under rhyme"

~ A lovely write, Dear Will-o-the-wisp!


EA

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10 posted 2003-09-04 10:44 AM



Always the mystical
romantic in you...

and I think Sy said it best.


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11 posted 2003-09-04 10:47 AM


I hide in underneath of things
waiting for the wind that’s mine

In a magical whole, these lines touch me most... beautiful work!

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12 posted 2003-09-04 11:43 AM


So touch this substance known as real
and kiss the doubt off cold then seal
with all the little things out there
so far so far


Oh, Martie, this is so pretty...I felt like I was
just skipping along on clouds as I read it.  
Hugs to you, sweet lady  
Ethel

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13 posted 2003-09-04 01:37 PM


And there is so far to go
to the end of this you know
all fluttered and gaining wing
I hide in underneath of things


me thinks you show more than you know...

very nicely done.. as usual.


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14 posted 2003-09-05 08:16 PM


Martie . . .

And there is so far to go
to the end of this you know
all fluttered and gaining wing
I hide in underneath of things
waiting for the wind that’s mine

ahhhh . . . but I do believe
you see beneath the brush quite well
xxoo

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15 posted 2003-09-05 10:33 PM




(smiles) And always take to heart that those beautiful things that work as tourniquet to doubt's wounds are closer than you think, they are just a heartbeat away! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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16 posted 2003-09-06 12:26 PM


Very very nice...yet again, you write a beauty!


Ed

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17 posted 2003-09-06 01:43 AM


Martie, know what this reminded me of?  The gliders and big kites behind my house on the mountain, wonder why?  What absolutely beautiful, effortless writing you always give us, and the best part for me is that you get my gray matter working full force   Beautiful!
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18 posted 2003-09-06 09:09 AM


You've taken me on a lovely poetic adventure... Again - Thank you kind lady...
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19 posted 2003-09-06 09:21 PM


I am very pleased that you are the only
person who can write as you do.  You are
so unique in your expression.....I love it!

PS....I brought my pen knife...

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20 posted 2003-09-07 07:39 AM


so far indeed--

lovely writing Martie- as is your norm. at least,~so far~

j

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byron

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