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bsquirrel

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0 posted 2003-09-03 01:31 PM

She lay her head below the line of the pines,
the scent of the trees, an envelope to read.
Addressed to the nearest cloud.
The contents were fierce, and soft as a shroud.

Said "This is why, and this is when, and this is how."
She lay her head below the line and cried.
When she lifted herself up, the cloud had moved on.
She stayed out with her memories well past dawn.

Martie

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1 posted 2003-09-03 02:51 PM

Mike

A cigarette is not near as pretty as this poem, or as good for you.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-09-03 02:53 PM

...Damn.
This is fantastic Mike!!

~ Summer can't be over...
I still have the sand in my shoes ~

Tiersdin
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east coast

3 posted 2003-09-03 03:12 PM

I've read this several times.

Intriguing...

~Tier

Jason Lyle
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With my darkling

4 posted 2003-09-03 03:29 PM

A great write, how many dawns have recieved my memories I could not count.

Jason

jellybeans
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5 posted 2003-09-03 03:31 PM

fantastic is right.......good to read you...and love the pic

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2003-09-03 03:57 PM

Hi, Mikey!

I read this poem several times and had a different take on it on each read! I like Tier's comment, "Intriguing". You are not one for spoon-feeding your readers! lol

Luvs 'n hugs 'n smilie faces,
Linda

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

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7 posted 2003-09-03 04:23 PM

Explanation:

When I think of cigarettes,
I think of woods and women in them.
How the sunlight falls through trees
and slants upon the soil.
How a woman lifts a locket
from a muddy rivulet.
How the smoke curls from her lips,
issues shadows to the sky.

Dark Angel
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8 posted 2003-09-03 04:59 PM

Fantastic Mike!

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

vandana

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USA

9 posted 2003-09-03 05:09 PM

enjoyed

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

10 posted 2003-09-03 08:55 PM

explanation is poetry too

Lady Godiva
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since 2003-09-03

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at the bottom of your glass

11 posted 2003-09-03 08:57 PM

I wish I had words to explain...now this is poetry...

angelblueyes
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Oklahoma

12 posted 2003-09-03 08:59 PM

This is wonderfuil.You bring such life to this.

Crystal

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

13 posted 2003-09-03 10:36 PM

michael...i love the way you write...h

Kaoru

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where the wild flowers grow

14 posted 2003-09-03 10:40 PM

Me too, H.. I love it.

Earth Angel
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15 posted 2003-09-03 10:40 PM

Mike, you should post your very poetic explanatory reply as well!

Linda

cuda04
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16 posted 2003-09-03 11:09 PM

this is amazing, i love it when people write raw emotion...

Always look forward, never look back, dreams are much more refreshing than regrets.

JilGirl
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since 2003-05-24

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17 posted 2003-09-03 11:26 PM

Awesome write! Truly from
the depths of a poet's creative
mind! Very fine expression!

'Tiz feathers that make the bird -
Always remember to keep them fluffed
but, never, EVER ruffle them!

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

18 posted 2003-09-04 03:39 PM

Thanks. To all the new faces, welcome. To all the old friends, hello.

.m.

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