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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2003-09-02 01:43 AM


Christmas

I felt like you had
To work me
Into your busy
Schedule

By this time
I knew
And it hurt
But I still hoped

And didn’t even know
What I hoped for
But that day was
One of my favorites

I remember what you wore
And how hard it was
To get you to take it off
And how I made you late

For what
I still don’t
Want to know

I just want to
remember
your smell
that you couldn't say no

And what I saw in your eyes


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1 posted 2003-09-02 01:45 AM


"And didn’t even know
What I hoped for
But that day was
One of my favorites"

Favorite days.. I miss those.

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2 posted 2003-09-02 01:58 AM


Full of such longing,sadness, and hope.A sense of an unsettling that you don't want to see.Always ready for more.
Crystal

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3 posted 2003-09-02 05:59 AM


Susan . . .
I do believe I know that look
This is awesome, Lady
xxoo

Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2003-09-02 08:25 AM


Meg~So do I...

Crystal~You hit it..unsettling...perfect description.  

Sue~That look should have told her it would have been alright to come clean with her feelings...

Susan

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5 posted 2003-09-02 08:58 AM


I am erally liking this series. I would say well done but any piece with your name attached is so
Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-09-02 09:09 AM


Thank you Dan!
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7 posted 2003-09-02 09:22 AM


the series seems to be a bit cathartic..and revealing of the truths you knew even then...

nicely done Susan.. quite nice indeed.

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8 posted 2003-09-02 09:39 AM


I've read them all up to this point...
I believe it's healthy to 'get it all out'..
So very well done Susan..
and love your pic!
~Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

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9 posted 2003-09-02 12:31 PM


sometimes we take whatever we can get...

great write....

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

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10 posted 2003-09-03 08:54 AM


hmmmm...well at least you got a Christmas...


*sorry, very moody today~

M

Susan Caldwell
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11 posted 2003-09-03 08:58 AM


Ron~Yes assuming it's non-fiction!

Enchantress~Thank you on both counts!

KristieSue~And settling is no fun!  Thanks for reading.

Susan

Susan Caldwell
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12 posted 2003-09-03 09:03 AM


M~ Yes you are right she got a Christmas and cherishes that memory.

I am sorry about the "moody today" I know that well...



Susan

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13 posted 2003-09-03 09:57 AM


how upsetting one can be to our lives, if we allow them to be...

I'm sorry, but I was here to...in your every word, and it will not happen again...I won't allow it...ever!  

God bless you Lady with many smiles of awareness....into the light of truth and virtue from a love that deserves you.


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14 posted 2003-09-03 10:57 AM


AWESOME
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15 posted 2003-09-03 11:28 AM


Well at least you got the present for Christmas even if you couldn't have the future.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Susan Caldwell
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16 posted 2003-09-03 02:03 PM


Lee~Thank you I am glad you can relate.

Dan~LOL you are bad!

Kethry~Who said it was over?  The future isn't here yet..

Susan

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17 posted 2003-09-04 12:43 PM


I remember what you wore
And how hard it was
To get you to take it off
And how I made you late

For what
I still don’t
Want to know


~ My favorite part of this well written 6th installment - especially the "For what..." segment. Enjoyed! Thanks for sharing, Susan.


Susan Caldwell
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18 posted 2003-09-04 12:47 PM


Thank you Mike!  That was my favorite part as well!  

Susan

J. K. Mitchell
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19 posted 2003-09-04 01:36 PM


Something tells me I need to go back and read the first ones.

Well done.

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20 posted 2003-09-04 02:24 PM


enjoyed
QjQ
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21 posted 2003-09-04 03:59 PM


from chapter to chapter your releasing your experiences and soon you will be free,,,

            


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22 posted 2003-09-06 10:47 AM


These are so addictive. and each i can identify with.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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