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El_Campeador
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0 posted 2003-09-01 12:19 PM


If I could fit a sunset
In the palm of my hand
I’d give it as a gift to you
So my love you’d understand.

If I could place a rainbow
Inside of your bedroom
I would watch you with a smile
As it drove away your gloom.

If I could take of the sky
And sprinkle your life with blue,
I would not spare anything
To bring such wonder to you.

But I can’t do these for you—
So come and take my hand,
There’s so much beauty around us
We must learn to understand,

Though I can’t give you sunsets,
Or create for you rainbows,
Come and take a walk with me—
God has given us all those!


[This message has been edited by El_Campeador (09-01-2003 12:20 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Benjamin Graber - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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1 posted 2003-09-01 02:50 PM


Ben this is so beautiful, it instantly reminded me of Hendrix's, "Are You Experienced",
toned down a notch
I loved this
xxoo

Nightshade
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just out of reach
2 posted 2003-09-01 03:11 PM


Lovely Ben, enjoyed. hugs,Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
            Emily Dickinson




    

Martie
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3 posted 2003-09-01 06:33 PM


El Campeador

If your dream is to touch hearts, then you have touched mine.

garysgirl
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4 posted 2003-09-01 06:36 PM


Ben, this is so beautiful. It has such a peaceful
feeling. I'm sving it to read over and over again.
I hope that you don't mind.  
hugs  
Ethel

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2003-09-01 06:41 PM


Benjamin~
And again you have succeeded in touching this heart~

This is lovely~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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angelblueyes
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6 posted 2003-09-02 01:05 AM


Ben, She'd be crazy not too.For knowing that you'd give all of these things in an instant is enough to make theheart fluuter and the soul soar. Well done.
Crystal

Paul Wilson
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7 posted 2003-09-02 05:59 AM


Ben...A very tender write. Enjoyed...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

SharaRose
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8 posted 2003-09-03 04:12 AM


This would melt the heart of the coldest. Very sweet write. Loved it!! Your poetry has touched me.


Shara @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

LeeJ
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9 posted 2003-09-03 08:16 AM


if true love is present and alive, in good will, faith and over abundance...then what else more essential could you give each other?   The essense of each other maintains...grows and honors, believing in the balance of the gift of grace, understanding and allowance
Earth Angel
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10 posted 2003-09-03 09:01 AM


--and thank you, Dear El_C, for gifting us with such soulful beauty!

Love & Light,
EA

NewEnglandlazurlu
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11 posted 2003-09-03 04:26 PM


Ben, some loving and thoughtful gifts you are offering. But a walk is a special time to be together, hold hands and see the sights of the neighborhood!

Hugs, Marti

Nature always tends to act in the simplest way.
~ Bernoulli ~

Sunshine
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12 posted 2003-09-03 04:29 PM



That's a walk and a half, Ben.  Well done!

jellybeans
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13 posted 2003-09-03 06:15 PM


*beaming smile*...just love this...wonderfully written
QjQ
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14 posted 2003-09-03 09:55 PM


very nicely penned write,,

         


Enchantress
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15 posted 2003-09-03 10:02 PM


Beautiful Ben...so much enjoyed.
~Hugs~

      ~ Summer can't be over...
  I still have the sand in my shoes ~

cuda04
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16 posted 2003-09-03 11:06 PM


how i hope that someday, someone will write something like this for me.

Always look forward, never look back, dreams are much more refreshing than regrets.

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