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Kaoru
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0 posted 2003-09-01 12:40 PM


You're quite
a serene
fellow..
You speak as if you've been through it all,
having never fallen in love.
Somehow still it is your endless flaw,
that sends me shivering down a river,
so pure still you
may know it .. you may know
of your perfection a little too much.
As I begin to disagree you put your
index finger vertically across my lips and ask..
"Who are you to argue?"
I couldn't give you the key whilst there is
no lock, though
you're not sure yet of that, you're..
Still clueless to the fact that
I'm on to you..I know what you're thinking..
You mentioned your taste for the Geisha,
the ancient tea serving dance..
Crickets hum of the evening,
pretending that I'm
not listening..that I'm pretty apathetic
toward the world.
But all the time
thinking.. I couldn't possibly
live without your drawling.. and your
natural hair carressing your forehead.
Perhaps you have been through it all, though
never fallen in love..
maybe
that's the tragedy, the
melancholy that glimmers in your eyes.
You asked me if
I'd like to kiss..
As I did not decline, you smiled,
and turned your face away..
You were happy just knowing
I would.
And I
knowing
you wouldn't...
"Not yet", you tell me,
"drink
your tea instead".



© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-09-01 12:42 PM


very very good write n read,,,,

         


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2 posted 2003-09-01 01:34 AM


breathless...h
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3 posted 2003-09-01 02:18 AM


You asked me if
I'd like to kiss..
As I did not decline, you smiled,
and turned your face away..
You were happy just knowing
I would.
And I
knowing
you wouldn't...
"Not yet", you tell me,
"drink
your tea instead".



I like this part especially, Meghan.
Hugs  
Ethel

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4 posted 2003-09-01 02:20 AM


Wow.  thats good.  A story of life an the undesirable but real.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

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5 posted 2003-09-01 03:33 AM


Beautiful lines, enjoyed
Joe Houck
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6 posted 2003-09-01 04:07 AM


This is really great.
I've actually done that before.
Asking if I may have a kiss and them being contempt with just the approval.
drives chicks crazy. =)
Great stuff
Joe

"The worst vice is advice" (Al Pacino, devil's advocate)

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7 posted 2003-09-01 09:20 AM


This is lovely.
Eric

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8 posted 2003-09-01 09:26 AM


Anticipation is half the fun!


EA

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9 posted 2003-09-01 04:33 PM


Have you read memoirs of a geisha? you must have.

I'll come back n comment when i can, more better. lol. i'm intoxicated. not a lauging matter. oh but it is.

Martie
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10 posted 2003-09-01 07:36 PM


Kaoru

I like the way you drew this scene...made me smile.

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11 posted 2003-09-01 08:18 PM


Yes this reminds me of "Memoirs" as well. Lovely write, and so descriptive.
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12 posted 2003-09-01 10:20 PM


ah

amore

you're in the right season for it... just don't let it seize you..

your talent is stretching Meg

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13 posted 2003-09-01 10:36 PM


This was wonderful Meg, though I am never dissapointed when I choose to open one of your threads!

This was a masterpeice right down to the last line!



Tima

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14 posted 2003-09-02 08:59 AM


This made me smile too....

You were happy just knowing
I would.
And I
knowing
you wouldn't...
"Not yet", you tell me,
"drink
your tea instead".


especially this, he sounds intriguing.

Maree


fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


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