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Paula Finn
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0 posted 2003-08-30 01:28 PM



Far away I felt
the echo of your cry
so very faint
like the first drops of rain
on upturned face.

Far away I felt
the echo of your cry
and wondered once again
if you remembered, if you remembered
what we once were.

Far away I felt
the echo of your cry
like butterfly wings
beating against the
closed door of my heart.

Far away I felt
the echo of your cry
and tears I didn't know
existed anymore
streamed down my face.

I felt you cry
on that faraway echo
echo's cry.


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1 posted 2003-08-30 01:35 PM


gosh....I can't pick a favorite line here....this touches me....

"Far away I felt
the echo of your cry
and wondered once again
if you remembered, if you remembered
what we once were."

lol ok, I can too pick a favorite line.....this is awesome

jade dragoness
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2 posted 2003-08-30 03:56 PM


echo heard
and understand
in this canyon


beautifully done, Poet Paula

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3 posted 2003-08-30 03:59 PM


---even the poem echoes! Very effective writing!


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4 posted 2003-09-03 11:42 PM


upon the tears of an echo crying
comes whispers of a far away voice
listening ~ hearing
that such a nice inspire
returns the echo



Thanks Paula

bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

[This message has been edited by bslicker (09-03-2003 11:44 PM).]

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5 posted 2003-09-03 11:51 PM


Beautifully done,but so sad.
Crystal

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