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suthern
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0 posted 2003-08-28 02:48 PM


Shavings of iron
Turning to rust
Having no use
Merely existing.
Then magnet's pull
Gave
Shape to particles
Reason for being
Breath for life
Strength
And shavings sang.

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Aenimal
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1 posted 2003-08-28 02:51 PM


great imagery!
Toerag
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2 posted 2003-08-28 03:02 PM


Nicely done gal.....shavings sang....my chest hairs are singing....Barbasol!!
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3 posted 2003-08-28 04:01 PM


Aenimal: Thank you very much! *S*

Toerag: Only you... *shaking head*... only you. *G* Thank you, Barbasol man... I'm heading east!!

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4 posted 2003-08-28 04:23 PM


What an image, and what a way to say it -- beautifully done, Laura. I am putting this one in my library for sure....originality and perfect execution, with a depth of feeling that just takes your reader along....thank you for posting this beauty.

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5 posted 2003-08-28 04:27 PM


Wow !! Love this piece my friend. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
            Emily Dickinson




    

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6 posted 2003-08-28 04:27 PM


Suthern

One of my first poems ever had a similar theme to this...very thought provoking and much enjoyed!

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7 posted 2003-08-28 04:37 PM


terrific,,,,

         


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8 posted 2003-08-28 05:24 PM


SweetSuthernGal~
What a beautiful piece~
Stirring~

You have a safe and fun trip gal~
Remember to SING ... there'll be no one to hear you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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9 posted 2003-08-28 05:34 PM


enjoyed
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10 posted 2003-08-28 06:28 PM


suthern
Everybody loves you and so do I.

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11 posted 2003-08-28 07:08 PM


This is soooo awesome. It is truly an inspired write.

We are all equal but we’re individually different
and able to reach the impossible if we try.

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12 posted 2003-08-28 07:20 PM


A unique and very enjoyable read!
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13 posted 2003-08-28 07:32 PM


Suthern, this was a really neat poem!

Huggums,
EA

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14 posted 2003-08-28 09:10 PM


it happens that way, yes...

I'm waiting for my magnet

suthern
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15 posted 2003-08-31 06:08 PM


Ratleader: There aren't many poets I admire and respect as much as you... so such incredible compliments truly honor me... I thank you so much! *S*

Nightshade: I'm so glad! *S* Thank you, my friend. *S*

Martie: I'm glad you enjoyed... thank you! *S*

QjQ: Thank you! *S*

Marge: The car is one place it's safe for me to sing... if I keep the windows tightly shut. LOL Thank you very much! *S*

vandana: Thank you! *S*

Seymour: And I love you, my friend... thank you!

Ringo: Thank you so much for that kind response. *S*

Midnitesun: Thank you so much for liking! *S*

EA: You're a dear... thank you very much! *S*

PS: Yes... and it's worth the wait. *S* Thank you! *S*

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16 posted 2003-09-03 03:07 PM


"and shavings sang".....oh my...simply superb
suthern
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17 posted 2003-09-04 10:00 AM


Thank you, sweet one of multiple colors... I appreciate you! *S*
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18 posted 2003-09-05 11:25 PM




(smiles) Oh Suthern, this is just gorgeous, sweet friend, it is just phenominal how love can put the pieces back together even when it seems the danger has run forever! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, may love always keep you together and feeling more complete than ever, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Suthern, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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19 posted 2003-09-05 11:35 PM


nicely done......shavings sang?.......like Toerag I too thought of chest hairs......not mine of course but I do shave my hubby's.......lol.
suthern
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20 posted 2003-09-06 05:12 PM


M'toe...even broken, seemingly useless pieces. *S* Thank you so much! *S*

Lisann: Great minds, hunh? LOL Thank you! *S*

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