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bklynboy
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0 posted 2003-08-28 08:04 AM



When did it happen
Yesterday, last week, last month, last year
I must have missed the funeral
Sadly to say

I stand in line
In solitude
Hearing a voice
"Can I help the next person in line"

I look around
Me
When did I lose my gender?
When did my manliness disappear?

I walk slowly to the voice
Transact my business
Only to be told
"Have a nice day"

Did they bother to see me
Did they care that I was there
For if not me, why them
I was the reason they were

Wish me not a pleasant day
But appreciate
Me for the dollars spent
For the business given

A simple courtesy
A thank you
Heart felt or not
Acknowlegment

My voice is silent now
My soapbox lonely
As I wander off
In a sea of "have a nice day's"

So when did it happen
My ears must have been shut
It couldnt have been yesterday
Or the week before, or even the year

I would have attended the funeral
Or at least acknowledged
The tragic truth
Manners and courtesy are dead

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2003-08-28 08:09 AM


bklynboy
Good write, enjoyed.

KristieSue
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2 posted 2003-08-28 12:55 PM


we become creatures of habit, and unfortunately, some manners have become habit....

good write

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

passing shadows
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3 posted 2003-08-29 04:57 AM


you musta been at Wal-Mart
inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2003-08-29 06:57 AM


would have attended the funeral
Or at least acknowledged
The tragic truth
Manners and courtesy are dead

at least the talking heads told you to "have a nice day"
what do you want her to....reach over the
register and plant one on you?
for the minimum wage these people make, be glad you got that much
go play a course or two, the green is calling you.......
and darling, have a nice superduper sunshiney day"....

Kaoru
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5 posted 2003-08-29 07:13 AM


lol@walmart..

You know, I understand the frustration.. but there's also the frustration of those that serve you..
Because, well, they "serve" you. Better a "have a nice day" than a swift kick in the butt and a "don't let the door hit you on your way out, sucker".

Heh,
I liked the write, though.. Don't get me wrong. You expressed your disdain well. We all have those experiences.


nakdthoughts
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6 posted 2003-08-29 11:24 AM


so true...the missing manners

M

angelblueyes
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7 posted 2003-08-29 11:32 AM


Oh passing shadows is in trouble, hehehehe.I work at Walmart and I give everyone the same courtesy I would want myself.Unfortunaately in this world there are people who don't care and it's a sad thing to see.Well written here.
Crystal

bklynboy
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8 posted 2003-08-29 08:19 PM


at least the talking heads told you to "have a nice day"
what do you want her to....reach over the
register and plant one on you?
for the minimum wage these people make, be glad you got that much
go play a course or two, the green is calling you.......
and darling, have a nice superduper sunshiney day"....

No....
All I want them to say is Thanks!
When I spent my money and my pockets are empty, its hard to have a nice day.
Why should I be glad they said that. Thats the point, we have become so complacent we have come to expect nothing more than "have a nice day". Well I want more! And I tell them so. I say your welcome....usually get a blank stare and then a sheepish,,,,thank you!
Is it better to go along with the crowd of acceptance. Well,I march to the beat of a different drummer. T thought you knew that.

inkedgoddess
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9 posted 2003-08-30 07:23 AM


Is it better to go along with the crowd of acceptance. Well,I march to the beat of a different drummer. T thought you knew that.

blahblahblah,
i expect flowers on my desk on tuesday morning

bklynboy
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10 posted 2003-08-30 12:48 PM


Roses?
inkedgoddess
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11 posted 2003-08-30 03:18 PM


Roses?

yes, im worth a dozen ruby reds, aint I, and i dont mean cyberones.either

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12 posted 2003-08-30 06:10 PM


enjoyed
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