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ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2003-08-27 11:59 PM

Now the bullets song
Death-hums
The child to sleep;
Has broke the mornings peace
With a sound that shook,
Deaths rattle.
*
Unaware
Is the singer,
Or the musics sender
Of those tiny ears,
Where from out now
Blood runs free.
*
Deaf,
The dead child hears
No life bell ringing,
Nor its mothers cry,
Cannot feel
Her bosom clutching,
Desperate rocking
Blind,
It cannot see
Her arms thrown God-ward,
Or the trembling
Of her lips
Repeating questions,
Pleading answers
Between sobbing,
Screaming
One word lines...
"why" "why" "WHY"
*
Quiet now
But for wails,
The only other sounds
Come from the pawns.
Khakis rustling,
Metallic
Chambers,
Loading
Locking.
Metronomes
Of death,
Mechanical.
*
Soldiers of misfortune,
Moving on.

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

1 posted 2003-08-28 12:08 PM

**So quiet...so powerful...so well put together...this touches the soul...**

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

2 posted 2003-08-28 12:10 PM

I hear you through your quietness.Well done here.
Crystal

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

3 posted 2003-08-28 01:04 AM

We are a violent species. One day with hard work and a bit of luck, in perhaps a thousand years we will begin to build peace.

Thank you for shring these painful images here.

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

4 posted 2003-08-28 07:45 AM

Startime and Angel...:-)
Beneath the "quiet" a different kind of soldier rages, fighting to believe that the stupidity of war would end in his lifetime.
Alas it has not, yet he still lives...and believes, as a greater poet once said "Hope dies last".
Thank you for reading this poem and for your soft comments.....ice

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2003-08-28 07:54 AM

Icebox
If this violent species does not learn to live in peace soon, I believe that it will not exist, the trial of a thousand years has already be transcripted, a verdict seems to be soon called in.
The painful image in this poem was inspired by a picture of an Afghan mother and her dead child...(pick any modern war, these images can be found in everyone of them)
In the background was a group of soldiers moving out, ther job was done there...These could have been soldiers from any army..
Thank you for commenting.....ice

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2003-08-28 09:41 AM

ice...I saw from your poem the exact photo that you talk about in your reply. The mourning of mothers to me, is the most audible sound that war makes. I wish for peace too! Great poem!

RunningWolf
Junior Member

since 2003-09-14

Posts 24
Michigan USA

7 posted 2003-09-16 11:15 PM

Nice poem Ice. Reminds me of some that Ive written after going hours with no coffee or during a thunderstorm.

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

8 posted 2003-09-17 01:33 AM

Love it my friend.

:-)

Ribbit

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

9 posted 2003-09-17 09:59 AM

Wonderful ending on this one. The whole poem hurts. I wish war never had to happen.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

10 posted 2003-09-17 10:38 AM

Well done ice man. Now this is the stuff I used to love reading from you in chat. Glad to see you have not lost your touch my friend. Keep it up! Missing everyone at ptochat. Your friend - Kevin a.k.a. DarkPoetry

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