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Blood Brothers |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Blood Brothers Pink Mimosa shades like umbrella over yard Spilling memory of the dig of youth’s slender arms Feathered and fragile reminders of the cost of time And my curved anticipation waiting to be rhyme Where does one go to hear the hymn of a chorus Of neighborhoods where memory is buried in a forest Where blackberry brambles hold the tattered paperback With pages turned down next to a bottle in a paper sack We slid into the culvert with honey hungry thoughts And touched the satin place of friends forget me not Even bled into each others wounded brotherhood You said though I was just a girl I was still pretty good The culvert’s still a cut of land all filled in redwood trees And blackberries are the jungle land of children still I see And the sweet taste of the fruit of youth lingers on my tongue Where you and I made promise that could never be undone -------- from 7-02 |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
*smile* Thank you for sharing this. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
 Thanks for sharing your memories with us.Crystal |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
"Pink Mimosa shades like umbrella over yard" You have a way with words, thanks for the enjoyable read Martie. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Martie Love that first stanza...a perfect introduction to the theme of the poem. The rest of the poem is compact, but clear, the last stanza ending the poem exactly where it should. The last two lines remindes me of a Bob Dylan song "Forever Young" Fine poetry, as always....ice/ford |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
On my hand, a scar; there somehow on yours, the same, as memory stirs.... Memory stirs of a time several months ago, when you showed me this poem, and I loved it almost as much as I do now. This one a classic. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Martie you have such a way with words..you weave beauty..i am in awe |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You sent my mind back several decades... and leave me smiling with thoughts of other mimosas and pledges... and being pretty good even though just a girl. *S* Excellent! *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ I've shared this one with my brother-of-blood~ I LOVE IT !!!! All the rich imagery jumps up and tumbles into my remember place~ *HUGLETS* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, this reminds me of when I was five years old and the neighborhood kids about my age were two little boys who lived across the street. I was "one of the boys", climbing trees and all the things they liked to do....until we all got a little older. I missed those days when we were all "brothers". I didn't like it when we became teenagers and one of them wanted me to be his girlfriend. I didn't know until I met Gary that you could also be "best friends" and "in love' at the same time.  Hugs to you  Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (08-28-2003 01:49 PM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
martie, hi, how are you doing, this was a stunning read, as all of yours are....thank you for sharing |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Oh Martie - how precious...sigh - I loved this - well that is redundant as I love all of your poems - Paul |
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