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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2003-08-27 10:26 AM


with only a moment to spare...


funny how thoughts won't let you rest your mind,
here were a few that forced themselves upon me...


Unsupported Bits 2


Behind the moon
and the haze that encircles,
nature follows the path...
stairsteps of stars
touching my eyes,
as I remember the softness
I once felt, when touched by yours.


I look out my bedroom window,
and see the death of a tree...
it has lost its tomorrow, the same as we.


I use to hand you my dreams
allowing you to mold me, slowly
peeling away my outer shell.
I thought you would see the tenderness there
waiting for you, longing for that embrace
that never came.

I sorrow in today, abandoned of heart
but always loving you.
I never needed you...always wanted you...
near enough to feel your warmth,
yet distanced enough to give you space.


I had a glimpse of love
before it closed the door
and left me
with an empty collage
of memories.
You were beyond love's reach.


thank you ahead of time...
M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...
1 posted 2003-08-27 11:32 AM


You've found yourself a style and a fan.

-MVS

You CAN make a difference:
http://educate-yourself.org/

allen silver
New Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 3

2 posted 2003-08-27 12:24 PM


funny how something so ugly as pain can create something so beutiful as your poem
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
3 posted 2003-08-27 12:39 PM


Thank you Mark...I appreciate the fan and poet in you, always.


What a surprise Allen, try not to read too much into my words, ok?
So you finally made it here.


Hope all is well with you.

Send me an email when you post one of yours ok? I am looking forward to reading you.

hugs
Renee

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (08-27-2003 12:54 PM).]

Opeth
Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543
The Ravines
4 posted 2003-08-28 07:33 AM


I look out my bedroom window,
and see the death of a tree...
it has lost its tomorrow, the same as we.


~ As the saying goes, the more that things change, the more they stay the same...and within this poem, that the meaning is plural.

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

5 posted 2003-08-28 08:30 AM


oh my sweet friend, perhaps not beyond love's reach, just not the time...no two people ever seem to be on the same plain at the same time...we must be patient and allow...and love unconditional...warm hugs coming your way...your writes are absolutely penetrating...
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
6 posted 2003-08-29 12:04 PM


My dear friend,
As this write bears witness...nothing has ever been beyond your reach.  I have found that the expectation wasn't always the plan.
Excellent work. TD

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
7 posted 2003-08-29 04:58 AM


it's amazing how much we think alike
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
8 posted 2003-08-29 01:44 PM


Opeth, yes a plural meaning,
thanks
M



LeeJ, no, beyond love's reach was correct...unconditional/lack of understanding/no matter which...it was  beyond.

Thank you, Lee
hugs back
M


ThisDiamond, in my life there can be no expectations...just disappointments

thank you for reading

M

Dixie, I wonder how many seem to be living  similar lives. At any rate, it is fun to see how we each use words to describe the same feelings.


M
  

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