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Haiku On Sandy Beach
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Haiku On Sandy Beach |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
The sunset yielded to starlight And the wave kept the rhythmic song, Pounding on from day to night As the salty winds played along, With old fingers the pen in hand, Slowly I wrote a simple haiku There on the shore in the wet sand To be washed away and taken to you As sand grind the feet I dream of your softest touch From lips tasting sweet The starlight is blinded by the sun, The tides have erased all away, The brightness and people come Upon the sandy vastness to play, I leave with a coat of fresh brine Hoping the waves can reach you, And touch your heart from mine Letting you know my sand Haiku. Gloom |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor, A delight to read and a keeper.  |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Seymour It pleases me that you could enjoy my words Gloom |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Coolness, I love the way you worked this.. like a pro!  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
look what just washed up on my shore in fla.....beauty...helen |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Prof. I like this better than anything I've ever read of yours. Maybe it's because it's about the beach, and I do love the beach. Anyway, I'm keeping it, too.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lovely Professor! I agree with Seymour that this is a "keeper." hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Great presentation... Very much enjoyed. TD |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this sandy beach...James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
hey gloom...I love the way you presented your lovely Haiku. Well Done and indeed a keeper. Maree fate is not just |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, all I am pleased you found this enjoyable. Gloom |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Not such a gloomy one? I love the beach and could sit there for hours...and I loved this piece. Susan |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
how beautiful |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Professor The ocean takes and leaves many messages...I think it sent yours. A lovely presentation of Haiku! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
waves do wonderful things  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
in waves of gladness do I read the words flowing from your fingertips |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This ones a keeper. The waves and sand can do many things.:squeeze;Crystal |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Professor, this poem within a poem is exquisite!--a jewel within a jewel. This is most definitely a  . You are a marvellous poet--and can be unbelieveably romantic!  To love, sandy beaches--and haikus! EA |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I am glad this is getting the attention it so deserves!!! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
How lovely. The story behind the poem, and very nicely done. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Just had to introduce some of your work to a new member. You don't mind having this gem bumped up, do you? |
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