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snowpants
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0 posted 08-24-2003 01:36 AM       View Profile for snowpants   Email snowpants   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit snowpants's Home Page   View IP for snowpants

Just a chance with your breath-filled space unbroken--
All it would have taken to win me
Was a few burning moments alone
With the ascending melody of each sounding mist.
I am unable to conceive
Of such a stage of elation,
Should you have called me in,
Even if for a momentís endurance...

I can tell--you knew the oceans would be rendered silent;
The clouds would have had nothing on the fruit of those minutes...


Just a risk of my pride for your unchecked blaze--
All that was required for the pleasure of such enticement
Was a temporary disregard of myself
And the reticence that kept me from each inspired moon.
Iíll never fully comprehend
The potential of your eyes in mine,
Should I have let go,
Just for a few fleeting seconds...

-kh '03

**to a moth who shall remain nameless:  OK??  you can stop demanding now......  

just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday...

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 08-24-2003 03:13 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

hey sp...those moths are persistant, ain't they?

and I for one am SO glad.

These boards have been doing without your words long enough.

I know I don't say it often enough, but you do write with such a lovely style of grace and intelligence, and a certain vulnerability that is simply irrestible.

Thanks for this touch of lovely, and thank that nameless moth too, will ya?

to both of you.
Sunnyone
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2 posted 08-24-2003 05:56 AM       View Profile for Sunnyone   Email Sunnyone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunnyone's Home Page   View IP for Sunnyone

I think this is an exquisite work of art, moth or no moth!!!! Quite a lovely read, and makes me wonder how many experiences we miss in life, because we don't allow them to happen......~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

Janet Marie
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3 posted 08-24-2003 06:54 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Just a chance with your breath-filled space unbroken--
============================

I can tell--you knew the oceans would be
rendered silent;
The clouds would have had nothing on the fruit of those minutes...

Just a risk of my pride for your unchecked blaze--
All that was required for the pleasure of such enticement
Was a temporary disregard of myself
And the reticence that kept me from each inspired moon.
Iíll never fully comprehend
The potential of your eyes in mine,
Should I have let go,
Just for a few fleeting seconds...

==============================


well, well, well, lookie what I found...
A post by ole frosty britches
And I only had to ask(demand?) once
Well what ever it takes...and KA is right..she captures the true essence and beauty of your words--she just says it so much more lovely than I do,

Have I mentioned I just love it when you use big words.  


love this line...


And the reticence that kept me from each inspired moon.


Well you know the moth loves getting her way, so thanks for indulging me with a post.

Now about these lines...

I can tell--you knew the oceans would be
rendered silent;
The clouds would have had nothing on the fruit of those minutes...



you aint neva lied heh

So...I can expect one of these again tonite?
one all week? Honey child--you dont KNOW demanding yet  

You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ...
and know my love and my desperation were one and the same.

J.Browne


[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (08-24-2003 06:56 AM).]

Nan
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4 posted 08-24-2003 09:22 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Hmmm... nameless moths?  We have those around here??  Nicely penned, snowpants...
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5 posted 08-24-2003 10:31 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Welcome home, Kris.  And welcome to Kansas!

[Sun thanks one mothy gal for her persistence...]
Duncan
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6 posted 08-24-2003 10:45 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

"Just a risk of my pride for your unchecked blaze--
All that was required for the pleasure of such enticement
Was a temporary disregard of myself
And the reticence that kept me from each inspired moon.
Iíll never fully comprehend
The potential of your eyes in mine,
Should I have let go,
Just for a few fleeting seconds..."

I LOVE this verse Kris!!  And know the feeling...so well.  Darn moths...can't live with 'em, can't swat 'em.  
snowpants
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7 posted 08-24-2003 11:19 AM       View Profile for snowpants   Email snowpants   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit snowpants's Home Page   View IP for snowpants

serenity:  why thank you for that...I am quite flattered...irresistible, huh?  that's quite a compliment...I do appreciate it...thank you!!

Sunnyone:  thank you very much...yes, you are right...pride, or just plain fear keeps us from a lot of experiences, doesn't it?  glad you enjoyed...

J:  LMAO...you ain't neva lied.....and, um, hey yo, insatiable--tonight??  now you're really pushing it       but, as always, thanks for the encouragement you never cease to give me with my writing...you ain't neva lied   and, big words, huh??  hmmm...I'll have to remember that...hehe

Nan:  yeah, I've found out the hard way...thanks Nan...glad you liked it...

Sunshine:  why thank you...I am quite enjoying the change of pace here...during the day, that is...at night, you get foxes running in front of your car...ack

Duncan:  LMAO...can't swat 'em...I couldn't have said it better myself...OOH, did I say that out loud...HI JM...hahaha  thanks Duncan...glad you liked it...

sp


just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday...

[This message has been edited by snowpants (08-24-2003 11:30 AM).]

Janette
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8 posted 08-24-2003 12:13 PM       View Profile for Janette   Email Janette   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janette

"Just a chance ..."

Ohhhhh this spoke volumes to me for I have wished this oh so many times.

Keeper here!

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

Martie
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9 posted 08-24-2003 11:16 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

snowpants....It is so good to see you posting after so long...this is a beautiful piece of your heart!
Midnitesun
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10 posted 08-24-2003 11:20 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

quote:
Just a risk of my pride for your unchecked blaze--
All that was required for the pleasure of such enticement
Was a temporary disregard of myself
And the reticence that kept me from each inspired moon.


Outstanding. Love the cadence, the soft  emotional glow of this piece.
Dee
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11 posted 11-17-2003 06:37 AM       View Profile for Dee   Email Dee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dee

"All it would have taken to win me
Was a few burning moments alone
With the ascending melody of each sounding mist."

sp, beautiful words, so touching. I have missed reading your work. Its good to be back in the blue.
I am so glad that moth can be demanding.

Dee

Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are.        Clearwater

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