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Jason Lyle
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With my darkling

0 posted 2003-08-23 10:21 PM


I've seen emptiness
before, I see through you blue
your eyes, judge like God


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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
1 posted 2003-08-23 10:23 PM


Powerful write..
Janette
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Chicagoland for now
2 posted 2003-08-23 11:14 PM


Oh dear ... the judgement of "blue" ... sounds ominous to me.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

littlewing
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3 posted 2003-08-24 09:43 AM


Oh God Jason I know those eyes
'cept the ones I know are hazel
nice senyru
xxoo

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Gaia
4 posted 2003-08-24 10:03 AM


yep, Jason
you've got this form
flowing in your veins now

well done, good write

I have hazel eyes

littlewing
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5 posted 2003-08-25 01:21 PM


LOL Kacy was talkin bout a man!
nice eyes, though  * smile*

angelblueyes
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6 posted 2003-08-25 01:32 PM


Powerful and strong here.You've got this down pat.
Crystal

inkedgoddess
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7 posted 2003-08-25 07:04 PM


too many judges
not enough juries

Gina Culliney
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8 posted 2003-09-05 04:49 PM


Beautiful write Jason.  Full of candor and simplicity.  Although my eyes appear piercing and cold to some, they are merely searching deeply inside others for the truth.

[This message has been edited by Gina Culliney (09-05-2003 04:50 PM).]

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